Flying across men's endless rails, whistling adrenaline Churning axles hissing past so many a longing gentleman Chasing what she's never had; rims gripping faithful track Each disembarking lover spurned; ne'er thought of turning back She, ever forward, leaves 'em gasping in billows of sultry steam Thick diesel firing through the veins of lady turned machine
H/T @Suzette B
Guten Tag
Der Mann weiss es sich nicht
die Frau hรคlt ihn im Auge
hat die Seele der Frau ihn ausgemacht
wird er entweder sein ganzes Leben darรผber klagen
dass er sich ihrem Willen nicht unterwarf
im Verzicht sie zu kรผssen
bis an das Ende seiner Zeit
ihrem rsoigen Mund
ihrem Liebesgeflรผster
in ihren Umarmungen
durch Fleisch und Blut
im Traum
am Tag sich darin verlieren
Herzliche Grรผรe
Hans Gamma
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ืืืืข ืืื
ืืขืจ ืืขื ืืฉ ืืืืืกื ื ืืฉื
ืื ืคืจืื ืืืื ืื ืืืื ืืืืฃ ืืื
ืื ื ืฉืื ืคืื ืืขืจ ืคืจืื ืืขืืืื ืืื ืืืืก
ืขืจ ืืืขื ืึธืืขืจ ืืึทืงืืึธืื ืืื ืืืขืื ืืขื ืึทืืข ืืืื ืืขืื
ืึทื ืขืจ ืืึธื ืืื ื ืืฉื ืืื ืืขืจืืขืืขืื ืืืจ ืฆืืืื
ืืื ืจืื ืึทืื ืกืื ื ืฆื ืงืืฉ ืืืจ
ืืื ืืขื ืกืืฃ ืคืื ืืืื ืฆืืื
ืืืจ ืจืึธืืขืืืข ืืืื
ืืืืขืจ ืืืืข ืฉืืฉืงืขื
ืืื ืืืืขืจ ืืึทืื
ืืืจื ืคืืืืฉ ืืื ืืืื
ืืื ืึท ืืืื
ืคืึทืจืืืจื ืืื ืืื ืขืก ืืขืฉืึทืก ืืขื ืืึธื
ื ืืืืจืืืข ืืจืืก
ืืึทื ืก ืืึทืืึท
ืชืืื ืจืื
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Ich habe Ihnen zu danken.
Why? ๐
Guten Tag
Ihre Poesie war mir die Anregung.
freundliche Grรผรe
Hans Gamma
Du bist sehr nett! (รผbersetzt von Google Translate)
-David
Trains will always retain their mystique for me. We lived in a small western Pennsylvania town with a sawmill and a railway station in the fifties when I was 5-8 years old. I remember what a marvel the new diesel engines were then. My 4-year-old brother hopped a freight train. Luckily, he was discovered before the train left the station.
As an adult, I have taken metro trains and auto trains many times. In Titusville, Pennsylvania, we took the “Dinky” narrow gauge steam train through the oil fields, and in Lancaster, through Amish farmland. ๐ I guess it’s about time we catch up with the rest of the world and get some high-speed railways!
Your poem has interesting personification, a metaphor of the train as a woman, and male passengers who are rejected suitors of the train. In all fairness to the lady, I believe they desert her first! The striking photo suits the poem well. Have a great day, Ben! โค
Thank you so much, Cheryl. Based upon your bio it seems you have led a life full of stories. It is very nice to meet you!
-David
Wonderful poem! You had my attention from the first to the very last word…
Thank you so much, Karima – I really appreciate it. This poem was a perfect example of me having no idea where the flow of words and thoughts ๐ก would take me – Essentially, I just followed the inspiration…
Wow, this is beautifully crafted โค๏ธ
Thank you kindly!
You’re welcome brother ๐
Very engaging!
thank you so so much! ๐๐ผ
Captivating work, Ben. Locomotives do capture our imagination and the personification you create in your poem is creative and sensory. Your poem also reminded of seeing a historic steam locomotive roll through Arizona last fall. Quite impressive! So is your poem.
Thanks, Michele! The train imagery came to me entirely because of the two blogger-poets that I linked to on the bottom right ๐
I love how creativity expands and how artists are inspired by other artists. โจ
โค
I love the use of metaphors in this beautiful tale! Reading this was a complete delight.
Thank you – the inspiration for the imagery was entirely from the two poets that I linked to on the bottom right – check out their poems – they’re both amazing!
I did! You’re very humble, Ben. I think that enhances all your works as a writer.
Thank you so much, Rishika ๐ณ
I grew up close to a railway line in the 1950s and it was all steam trains then. They were always referred to in the feminine ‘she’ just like that old song ‘She’ll be comin’ round the mountain when she comes’.
Wow. I didn’t realize that song is about a train!
I always believed it was a train song and when I checked it on the internet it turns out that originally the tune was a spiritual hymn sung by those building the railroads (in America).
ah-hah!
thanks!
Kudos on your powerful train of thought…๐
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Wonderful imagery! Well articulated! You say you are inspired by others, but in the process, I think, you also inspire others. Great!
KK, you are a very, very sweet man. Thank you.
Thanks for compliments from an equally sweet man!
โค
I love steam trains and an Ode to one is as original as is memorable. Thank you, Ben.
Joanna
Thanks so much, Joanna!