My first villanelle
Together we, she, holding my finger Little, growing hand, everything to me Moments ever, and forever linger Abba'chka, I, to the preschool bring her Come afternoon, she'll be returned to me Together we, she, holding my finger She, annoyed by childish tunes I sing her Teasing her thus brings such delight to me Moments ever, and forever linger Don't joke! She, hates on my witty zinger Of late, she's sure been talking back to me Together we, she, holding my finger Mamachka? She, hears my cellphone ringer She, reciting grocery list to me Moments ever, and forever linger I love you! Asserts my little clinger Her love, our love, God's precious gift to me Together we, she, holding my finger Moments ever, and forever linger
d’Verse is taking a break for the holidays so there won’t be any prompts for a while…
So I’ll be trying out a few new forms with prompts born of my mind instead!
I considered the idea of responding to prompts from other groups, but d’Verse satisfies my creative curiosity more than well enough – and I don’t want to spend all of my time responding to poetry prompts.
Oh this is a sweet-smelling note to your precious one. Filled with joy, little truths and some banter, I love the spontaneous prompt.
So she is back chatting now, lol, that must be the cutest moment of together. I would’ve love to see your face in that moment.
Such refreshing, free and unburdened poetry written through the glow of innocence, a prompt of pure love.
I see a children’s illustrated collection hanging in the wings.
You simply good at what you do ben. I’m jealous hands down.
Thanks, Abi β€
This was a fun one for me!
-David
Fresh and free, we feel it in every phrasing. You are welcome benπΉ
Wow! Beautiful lines, rhyming too!!
yep – villanelles are meant to rhyme – I’ve decided to play with new-to-me forms π
You must do. You have a creative mind. All the best π
Really nice, I always love this structure
Thanks so much, Ari π
-David
Ah, David, what a gorgeous poem. It’s filled with pure love.
Thanks so much, Gabriela. Sometimes, they just flow, don’t they? This one was written across my heart before I began to type.
-David
My pleasure David. I know what you mean. That’s a love I know.
xoxo
Oh so beautiful, David! This moments with our little ones are indeed precious.
Thanks, Ingrid. It’s really special. My poem doesn’t even do the experience justice, TBH!
-David
I think it does!
Beautiful
Thanks π
-David
Oh wow… honestly David… this is such a delight to read. So beautifully crafted, so sweet… loving, heavenly, and yet also literary… WordPress’d mead.
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Now you’ve made my Dad even more… β€οΈβ€οΈ
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Very very beautiful poem this David, and didn’t it bring a lot of nostalgia! From the day I walked my daughter to her pre-school, she clinging onto my finger like that, to where she is now, gradually growing into a smart and elegant girl, starting to sweetly correct my etiquettes which are old world for her now, and admonishing me when I repeat her childhood baby talk π
Awww, I’m so glad you could relate, Deb π
How old is your daughter now?
Yours,
David
A big girl of 11 now David π
That’s HUGE!
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great villanelle, you adoration for each other radiates and blesses us all!
Thank you, Kate
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Your love for you daughter shines through.
Thanks so much, Lisa. I really hope it does π€
Yours,
David
You’re very welcome, David.
Reblogged this on Nelson MCBS.
A sweet moment that I am sure you will hold forever. I held my great nieces’ hands on Saturday. Precious little ones. π₯°
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Beautifully penned!
Thank you!
-David
This is so precious!
Thank you so much. I’m totally biased in this matter, but my daughter is, indeed, precious! π§π»
Sincerely,
David
David, as parents we all are biased but that’s okay, I think. I am guilty of it too. I had written a trilogy of poems for my daughter. Much love to your angel.
You are welcome.
Awww… are those poems online? How old is you daughter now?
-David
Yes, they are on my blog. She is seventeen now. Good heavens! Why do they grow so fast!!
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Perfect
You are very kind. Thank you!
-David
Love! The imagery and the rhyme scheme work so well here.
Thanks, N. π
I go by JYP. Thanks
Oops, sorry!