Shackles Cold Restraining Chilling Locking Binding Inescapably bound in place Cable Round Connected Coiling Twisting Looping Securely wrapping all around Bracelet Pretty Shiny Sparkling Glinting Twinkling An attractive wrist ornament Trinket Tiny Worthless Hanging Dangling Swinging Only for sentimental folks Trifle Paltry Little Piddling Trifling Niggling Utterly worthless minor thing Fragment Shattered Pointed Piercing Cutting Stinging Greater picture remains hidden Portion Lot Separate Parting Taking Giving Different for every person Fortune Wealthy Elite Boasting Owning Spending Far beyond mere security Plenty Nice Comforting Soothing Saving Freeing Enough for all emergencies Torrent Wet Powerful Gushing Bursting Flooding Tremendous deluge overcomes all Outflow Swift Measured Streaming Rolling Pounding Water and language similar Poem
I’ve been experimenting with various forms of poetry of late, and I came upon the ‘cinquain’. At its core, the ‘cinquain’ is a five line poem. There are, of course, variations; and I settled upon the following rules, as a challenge to myself:
- Line 1: One word, two syllables (a noun, the subject of the poem)
- Line 2: Two words, four syllables (adjectives that describe the subject in line 1)
- Line 3: Three words, six syllables (-ing action verbs–participles–that relate to the subject in line 1)
- Line 4: Four words, eight syllables (a phrase or sentence that relates feelings about the subject in line 1)
- Line 5: One word, two syllables (a synonym for the subject in line 1 or a word that sums it up)
I was immediately struck by the fact that the 5th line of a cinquain (according to the above rules) takes the very same form as the 1st line (i.e. one word, two syllables), which led me to wonder… how many cinquains could I reasonably manage to string together?
My goal, I decided, would be to start with the word ‘shackles’ and somehow get myself to the word ‘poem’.
58 thoughts on “Shackled, or: Flowing”
I like the idea of making a chain with the cinquain. Putting it on my list if things to try. (K)
Please share when you do 🙂
A beautiful form, cinquain! I liked it.
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Yes, I like it very much, the philosophical is there. Most notably in the comparisons (implied or expressed) between water and poetry. Nicely penned. How your images progressed from “shackles” to “poem”…amazing 🙏😊👍
Thanks, Suzette 🙂
You know, that was actually (to be even more specific) my goal – I figured if I could somehow get from ‘shackles’ to some word related to ‘flowing’ — then I could end it with ‘poem’… and it seems you saw that right away 🙂
I love the cinquain form! You’ve cracked it here for sure. Well written!
Thank you so much, Carol! ❤
This was an incredible write! I personally find it difficult to write in a particular form but I think this was a great cinquain!
Thank you, D.!
Wow, this sounds like a challenge, but I love what you’ve done with it! Perhaps I’ll set it as an EIF poetry challenge if I can get the hang of it myself first 😅
If you do, can I submit this piece? Or do I have to write a new one?
Of course, it’s fine to link up older poems!
Nice job David
Thanks, Lauren! Shavua Tov to you!
I love the cinquain form You did a fabulous job. You are so good , Davidoff 🤗❤️
You’ve done a great job here. ♥️
Thanks so much 🙂
I recently penned Triolets and Cinnquain is all time favorite
Oh, I’ll have to try some triolets myself! 🙂
(I’ve never written any)
Thanks for the suggestion, Gitanjali!
🙌 Thank you for writing David! Amazing train of thought Beautifully penned!
Thank you so, so much, Sangeetha. I’m pretty sure I discovered the cinquain through your beautiful poetry!
Aww that’s so sweet of you to say. I’m enjoying your exploration of poetry forms. I’m inspired ( and tempted:) to try
This is not bound- it is fluid and free.
Good job Sir David ben Alexander!
you know, FF, I actually think this is a legitimate philosophical question – for me, the poem was actually both of these things at once!
thank you so much for your support, kind Sir!
I find that it was intentionally bound and uncontrollably fluid. I think you have managed to capture these words- then set them free.
You are welcome to all my support! Thank you in turn, for yours as well!
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