Seedling, or: Watering can

My first tanka

Sprouting eagerly;
Stretching, absorbing learning,
Seedling roots search deep
~
Humble grey watering can;
Though I get refilled daily

EIF Poetry Challenge #14: Tanka

The above poem is my entry for Ingrid’s most recent poetry challenge. She provides a very thorough explanation of tanka poems for those who are curious to know more. But ~

In short:

  • The first three lines (following the haiku format) are the ‘upper poem’ (kami-no-ku) and the final two lines are the ‘lower poem’ (shimo-no-ku);
  • To write tanka in English, we normally divide the poem into five lines with the following syllable pattern: 5/7/5/7/7.

35 thoughts on “Seedling, or: Watering can”

  1. Thank you for your entry, David: a very unusual and interesting metaphor…if it is one, and you’re not just writing about the humble watering can! I wasn’t sure my description was thorough enough…

  2. Wonderful! And I’m reading it as a metaphor for myself–I like being a humble gray watering can that still has useful, valuable purpose! 🙂

    1. It’s interesting, you know, it really does take time to find the right words with the right sounds and meanings to convey my ideas in this form.

      Thanks, Kerfe!

      Yours,
      David

  3. I love this! Might I add, I love the colour you used in the text too haha. I have a thing for subtle tones. 😍😊

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