Seedling, or: Watering can

My first tanka

Sprouting eagerly;
Stretching, absorbing learning,
Seedling roots search deep
~
Humble grey watering can;
Though I get refilled daily

EIF Poetry Challenge #14: Tanka

The above poem is my entry for Ingrid’s most recent poetry challenge. She provides a very thorough explanation of tanka poems for those who are curious to know more. But ~

In short:

  • The first three lines (following the haiku format) are the โ€˜upper poemโ€™ (kami-no-ku) and the final two lines are the โ€˜lower poemโ€™ (shimo-no-ku);
  • To write tanka in English, we normally divide the poem into five lines with the following syllable pattern: 5/7/5/7/7.

35 thoughts on “Seedling, or: Watering can”

    1. It’s interesting, you know, it really does take time to find the right words with the right sounds and meanings to convey my ideas in this form.

      Thanks, Kerfe!

      Yours,
      David

  1. Wonderful! And I’m reading it as a metaphor for myself–I like being a humble gray watering can that still has useful, valuable purpose! ๐Ÿ™‚

  2. Thank you for your entry, David: a very unusual and interesting metaphor…if it is one, and youโ€™re not just writing about the humble watering can! I wasnโ€™t sure my description was thorough enough…

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