My second attempt at ‘Magnetic Poetry’
I discovered the ‘Magnetic Poetry’ website via Kerfe and Jane, and it intrigued me. Honestly, I am still not entirely sure how I feel about this, but this 2nd poem (below) pleases me more than my 1st attempt.
For this, my 2nd poem, I decided to do away with the rule that I had arbitrarily set for myself last time, which was to make use of every single word I was given. Instead, I took Kerfe’s and Jane’s advice and cycled through the available word magnets, selecting only those that called out to my poetic muses.
beating heaving breasts beneath
enormous purple moon we trudge together
and scream through the blue mist
drunk on blood and death
shadows whisper in dream symphony
like wind of a thousand bitter moans
storming above still diamond waters
of rocky black sea love
definitely improving!🙂
Thanks, Hobbo❣️
-David
you’re welcome!
I think it works a lot better when you just use the words which speak to you 💫
Yes, I am inclined to agree
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David
Yep, getting something better now. The next stage is to work around the magnet words you like with words and phrases of your own, that they spark in your imagination. The word pool, as you’ve already noted, is very limited so if you don’t add your own material, you end with with a lot of poems about moons diamonds purple blood and moaning 🙂
I wish there was a cool graphic way to insert my own words.
There is, but it’s in your head. You’re the only one with access, David 🙂
This is decidedly an improvement over the first one! 😊
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I think so too 😁
👍🏼 I am sure the next one will be even better! 😀
Vivid images in these — it’s interesting what you’ve come up with from the random words.
Dave,
yeah – it’s a strange experience to begin writing a poem, having no idea what the poem is going to be about 🙃
Thanks!
David
Too much for my ancient brain, Ben, but I enjoyed the poem all the same.
Elizabeth, there’s no right or wrong with this exercise 🙂
I loved the second one. ☺️ I shall have to try it sometime!
It’s actually quite a lot of fun 😀
Do you have a link you can share or is it something you purchased?
online for free: http://play.magneticpoetry.com/
Thanks David. Let’s see if I can get addicted too ☺️
That is fantastic. I especially love that lines: shadows whisper in dream symphony like the wind of a thousand bitter moans. I might have to borrow that one, David.
I would be honored if you do, George!
The honor is mine, mate. Here we are…
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Dark and intense. This one gives me a vivid vision. Keep at it! (K)
Thanks, Kerfe 🙂
Love the first two lines of the second poem. 💕 I clicked on the link you provided. I will give it a closer look, especially the “Mustache Poet.” 😂 Thanks for the share. Poetry… everywhere!
it’s super fun 🙂
I think I’ll give another go at some point in the not too distant future.
Thanks, Michele!
-David
Nicely done!
Thanks❣️
-David
This is another hit for me. Loving this magnetic poetry thing in your hands; you manage it very well. :))
are you tempted to give it a go? 😉
I tried but the website didn’t work in my browsers. I could see the words but when I clicked them nothing happened. :))
😢
I will leave it to you David. :)) Though I was a bit p’o’d since I was clicking away thinking I’d made something brilliant but alas nothing was registered/saved. ;)) 😂
I just ended up taking a screen shot.
🤷♂️
Ah ok. Just wrote/typed them down outside the app/web page? Got it. Guess I was a bit lazy in that moment! 😂
This looks like so much fun!
I think you used the words really quite beautifully & have put together a lovely piece. I really like each line to be honest, I saw beauty in all of it 😊🌹
Amirah,
That is truly very sweet of you to write. Thank you.
Yours,
David
Your welcome David 🙂🌹
I absolutely love this!
Thanks so much ❤
-David