A couple of days ago, you provided me with an outpouring of wonderful advice, as to how I might nurture and develop my six-year-old daughter’s poetry talents. Truly, the many suggestions for approaches, games, techniques… were simply amazing. Thank you so very much.
By coincidence, the very following day my six-year-old told me that she wanted to write a free verse poem with me (“a poem that doesn’t rhyme,” she said). I explained to her that poetry doesn’t have to follow the rules of grammar and that lines can break wherever the poet so choses. Also, I emphasized that poetry is intended to express feelings ~ that the most important thing is to feel the words.
Shortly after completing our first collaborative free verse poem (which she deliberately wrote in a silly way), she asked me if she could try to construct a poem with me online on MagneticPoetry, as she had seen me do several times myself. To be honest, I was somewhat hesitant about this because I thought that the aspect of playing with the magnets would distract her from attempting to construct a poem, but many of you (and my mother) had suggested than I just let her play and learn by doing… so I agreed.
Below are our latest pieces, both free verse:
Two poems, a collaboration
by David (41) and Liorah (6)
The car found a cat The bar found a bat The bat was hanging The cat was banging The bat said “can you stop that?” The cat said as he walked on the bar to the car, “I don’t want to!” “Why? Are you not going to stop that?” Atop the car, beside the bar, the cat stared at the bat from afar He said to the bat, “I do not want to because I like it.” He banged on the bar; it made the bat cry. “I am so sorry!” For the cat was now worried about what he did. The bat said, “Why did you do that?” The cat sat then lay flat on a mat near the bat; put on his hat and said to the bat, “Sometimes it’s hard to control myself, you see.” The bat said, “Yes I do see.”
I was not the one who began this poem ~ she deliberately wrote something silly about a car finding a cat because she liked the concept and because the two words sound similar. Following her lead, I wrote: “The bar found a bat.” After all, fair is fair – am I right? 😉
Liorah and I took turns with this piece, and upon writing the ending, she asked me, “Do you like my ending?” I smiled. “Very much,” I said and hugged her.
bluest sky the girl sees spring goddess in diamond red gown let storm beauty soar sweeter and music mist spray on those forest lake winds
I had to teach her about the magnets with word endings like ‘est’, ‘s’, and ‘er’, as well as how to manipulate the mouse to drag the virtual magnets to the left side of the screen.
Also, when it was my turn to add some words to the poem, she became a bit impatient as I scrolled through all of the available words looking for some that spoke to me. I had to explain to her that this is how I personally write Magnetic Poetry, but she remained rather irked with me. I guess I’m just an old fuddy duddy.