A ‘Magnetic Poem’ tanka
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they uploaded her to digital love dungeon from native planet to play sexy girl games but she was not humanoid
Notes
- I decided to take a [temporary] departure from the ‘Nature Set’ of virtual magnets because the words were beginning to feel stale; I selected the ‘Geek Set’ instead;
- I had thought that this would be easier, but I was wrong;
- Writing something that sounded poetic with the ‘Geek Set’ was challenging, despite my strong affinity for Dungeons & Dragons and science fiction;
- I once again opted for a tanka, rather than a haiku, because I enjoyed the challenge last time;
- Tanka traditionally have a ‘turn’ in the 3rd line, but I didn’t include one in the poem because I couldn’t put together one that flowed well;
- This tanka was inspired by the image of the flying saucer and cow above; from there, it quickly became silly;
- The shape of the poem itself is intended to resemble a flying saucer and light beam coming down from it,
- Actually, I just realized that I’m missing a syllable in the 4th line, which means that this isn’t exactly a tanka… but the shape of the poem works for me 👽
Using the traditional Japanese form to write about the objectification of Japanese women in anime and manga art, and by its aficionados is clever. I would like to see you raise the stereotypical dehumanization of women into a more sympathetic light. Maybe I’ll give it a go!
That’s a terrific idea – if you do so, please share the link with me – I’d love to see it 😀
Yours,
David
Hello, David.! Thank you for inspiring me to write! I have been enjoying your work. I have failed to find the like button on any of your posts? Is it hiding? Best wishes from San Francisco to Israel!
Thanks so much, TPS 😀
On my screen, if you look at one of my posts (like this one, for example), below the text of the post, there are 3 buttons to “share”. Then, below those, there are two buttons: one to “reblog” and one to “like”. Can you see them?
Yours,
David
Thank you! I can see them now! I hope you have a good day, David! TPS
You did well putting this one together!
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I think I like this set of words and the resulting poem & image better than the nature set! It’s almost a bit of flash fiction – “Sexy girl games gone wrong”.
To me, it feels less poetic, but more amusing 🙃
Regardless, it was nice to change up the challenge a bit for myself.
It almost does feel like a little story. I find it quite amusing too!
Thanks 😀
Cute and silly, David! 🙂 I am just wondering about the aliens. Do you think there is “grass” in outer space?
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You appeared in Discover and had to click thru because I have a cow abduction lamp… it hovers between the grass and a spaceship.
Wow; that’s so cool (and funny). What is it made of? Plastic?
-David
Mostly! It’s called the Alien Abduction Lamp. I’ve seen knockoffs but mine is an original, still in box (cause my house is a disaster and it deserves better).
I also have a box of magnetic poetry magnets somewhere. I like the idea of the website but it doesn’t like my phone.
Leenda, maybe you should keep it in the box – I’m sure it’ll be worth a lot of money some day!
-David
Woe… timing.. the original lamps are being relaunched right now! But at $112USD, I don’t think I need another.
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Well this made me laugh out loud. Why should humanoids have all the fun? (K)
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Silly sci-fi on a Monday feels about right. 😂
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She was not humanoid, cool. Great tanka 😊
💝 Amirah 💝
Sounds too much like modern love to be funny.
well, I have to admit that I did not expect that comment, Muri!
-David
Ahh, for the joys of bovine love.
Moo.
You inspire me to do a tanka now. This verse is so millennial, so hep and happening.
Love the mind blowing idea. It’s simply fantastic.
I should warn you that silliness may be contagious, Yassy! 😷
I like silly crazy 😜.. Crazy is good.
sci-fi magnet poetry. I’m in awe. Spectacular.
Thank you, but really ~ don’t be in awe!
It’s nothing more than pure silliness 🤪
-David
I’m sure they didn’t care that ‘she was not humanoid!’
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Exactly what I was thinking, if this were to mirror the real world of gaming. Also that they removed her humanity, making it easier to upload her to their dungeons and play sexy games with her….
Yes, it sometimes seems like a woman stripped of her personality, humanity and (probably most importantly) her opinions makes the perfect sex object!
Wow. That’s it exactly. Perfectly said! And when we hold back our opinions, as women… which is definitely more easy than stating them, when faced with society, particularly its most opinionated representatives… we nonetheless are partly guilty!
Ingrid, I think that’s pretty much the definition of a sex object, no?
Unfortunately yes. I see far too much objectifying of women for my own comfort and you may call me a feminist, it isn’t a dirty word to me, I’m just sad that I have to be, because we’re a long way off equality right now.
I identify as a feminist – I don’t consider it a dirty word. To me, it simply means that people, regardless of gender, should be afforded equal opportunities, based upon their abilities. Really, for me at least, it’s more “humanist” than “feminist”, but that’s what I mean by it.
I must add that I don’t blame either men or women for this situation, it’s more a symptom of our throwaway society.
Well, there’s a lot of history and biology behind it, obviously, but that doesn’t mean that things shouldn’t be changing for the better in our modern world.
For what it’s worth, Lia (not that I disagree with your point of view, mind you), I meant that the cow, which the aliens had “uploaded” was not humanoid 🐄
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David
I know David, I am sorry I didn’t notice the image till after! This kind of objectification is happening online though, particularly in certain video games, which I have seen firsthand. Sorry I took it a bit seriously. :)) Hugs and thanks for being so awesome. :))
Lia, we are in total agreement on this ~ no worries!
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David
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