Change, or: Defiance

38 thoughts on “Change, or: Defiance”

1. You took the form and ran like the wind with it, David.

   1. Thanks, Lisa ❤

      1. You’re welcome.

2. “Drawn, still, by illusion of change”
   There’s something so intriguing about that line. Brilliant write!

   1. Thanks, D. 🙂
      That’s very kind.

3. Nice work on the form – I’ve never tried it!

   1. Thanks 🙂

4. Hi David – great but not in yellow, me can’t see clearly

   1. Andrew,

      I selected a color that’s meant to resemble my Caucasian skin tone. It’s a light color against a dark background so I was hoping-thinking that it would be readable 😦

      Here’s the text for you:

      Through & through, ever feeling strange
      Parts, confused, will not be arranged
      Drawn, still, by illusion of change
      Something defiant at my core
      Demanding utter acceptance
      Drawn, still, by illusion of change
      Parts, confused, will not be arranged
      Through & through, ever feeling strange

   2. I changed it to green after somebody else mentioned having the same problem. Better now?

      -David

      1. Much better.

         1. good. and how are you feeling?

5. Your words are not clear…looks brownish, not easy to read.

   1. how about now? I changed the color to green.

6. Now, it looks good.

   You have composed a good poem. You have good control over emotions and mindsets.
   If we have to move forward we have to choose the available options or we have to create our own path.

   1. Thank you so much for the feedback, Lokesh.

      ❤
      David

      1. What is the motto and theme behind writing a poem David?
         I’m simple, I accept myself and I want to help people to resolve their issues. But somehow, I am not very clear about what I should write. I’m interested in writing a blog series.

         1. Lokesh, personally, I do not write poetry to help other people – I think the best poetry I write is written for myself.

            My poetry is either very personal (based upon my own life) or creative (fictional).

            My advice would be to write poetry about your own life experiences and fantasies, rather than thinking about what other people may want.

            Yours,
            David

         2. I remember when I shared with you that we forget sometimes that our life has an end in your post.

            I accept your true advice. I read it somewhere but when someone speaks same words from his experience and not reading from a book, it is more human and valuable. Thanks a lot, my young friend.🙂

         3. I am not so young, but thank you!

         4. I know.

            But I doubt, people call you young by considering your age. What do you think??

         5. I don’t know – not a lot of people call me young nowadays 😀

            How old are you?

         6. I’m in my early 20s.

         7. ah-hah! so you are younger than me 🤪

         8. Yes😃

7. […] I saw a new (to me) form of poetry on two blogs: Skeptics Kaddish and K. so I had to try it out for Day 7’s prompt! It’s called an octo. I wrote two as I wanted […]

   1. ❤

8. You’ve really taken advantage of the mirroring of phrases here. I wonder how much we ever really can change that core. And thanks for the shout out! (K)

   1. Thanks, Kerfe 🙂

9. Nice work, David! Octo…. 😃😃🌹

   1. 💞Diana💞

10. I really like this. It’s a beautiful a/symmetrical form with a defiantly accepting core message!

    1. bingo!

       🧡

11. sorry I can’t appreciate the forms and the work of intertwining your poetry but love the poem!💖

    1. Cindy, what do you mean that you can’t “appreciate” the forms? I don’t quite understand that statement. 🤷‍♂️

       What, to you, would “appreciating” a form of poetry entail?

       Yours,
       David

       1. whoooops. I suppose I blundered that comment David…. Sorry!
          What I meant to say was there are so many forms and it’s amazing and I do indeed appreciate all of it but with time constraints don’t always read all of the rules and directions which I’m sure would make me appreciate what you have created even more wholeheartedly. I mean moreover that I love what you do with words to create poems even though I don’t always take time to listen to the structure of what you are creating. At the end of the day, it’s just great poetry to me. Hope that is clearer now. 🙏🌷fingers crossed.

          1. Cindy, yes! Now I totally understand what you meant! Thank you for clarifying, and thank you for the lovely compliment! You are very, very sweet. I really appreciate your comments and friendship.

             All best,
             David

          2. Oh Great and thanks for asking. It’s one of the things dyslesic people do is dive right in with no context so I’m happy you asked me. Writing is helping me with that.
             You’re very welcome David!
             oh thank you so much and I appreciate yours!
             💖

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