A ‘Magnetic Poem’ tanka
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tongue licks luscious sweat
finger smears sweet, raw peach juice
bared breasts aching, "please"
heaving deliriously
death goddess smells blood in her
Notes
- For this poem, I decided to return to the ‘Original Set’ on the Magnetic Poetry website;
- At first, the lack of an obvious theme left me utterly rudderless (other sets include ‘Geek’ and ‘Nature’), but then a number of suggestive sex words jumped out at me so I pulled these out to see what might come of them;
- However, this set of words left me dissatisfied – it was too easy to paint the picture of a carnal act with them;
- I wanted to add some sort of a twist so I continued looking through the magnets and chanced upon the word ‘death’, which immediately sent my thoughts flying in the direction of sexy vampires;
- I again opted for a tanka, rather than a haiku;
- The extra two lines (14 syllables) provide me with a greater challenge, as well as with a larger canvas for my word-brush;
- I searched for and found the featured image of the pale, ginger-haired woman with fang marks on her neck after writing the fourth line of the tanka;
- That was after I had decided to give the poem its unexpected ending.
The magnets certainly take you to some interesting places…(K)
Yeah – for sure. That’s the cool thing about them, right, Kerfe?
❤
David
Yes.
oooh this was a fun delight and fright for the senses David. I’m going to close my windows tonight…. hahahahah 💖
🤭 Cindy 🤭
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Delicious.
I actually thought you would appreciate this one, George – even as I was writing it!
🙂
David
Across the seas, my friend, you nonetheless know me well.
I can’t imagine why, mate, your writing continues to inspire me to write, even when I feel more inclined to be the silent reader I usually am… Okay, maybe I do understand why–you’re a great writer! Still, rather than share this one on my own blog, here you go (with appropriate blushes):
amorously befuddled
clever dick Ellington—
fingering grandly her inside
jealously knowing
lascivious moans nurture
orgasms powerfully quivering—
regrets speaking timidly
until veiled wonder
(e)xcoriates youthful zeal
Ok, that’s just not fair, George. Now you’ve gone and made me look bad! This is so bloody (as I imagine you would say) good❣️
Wow’d,
David
I humbly follow your lead, oh wise and witty mate of mine. Nothing I write could make you look bad. And it took me hours to compose that! Glad you liked it.
yeah, mine took me hours too! it’s crazy time consuming – that’s why I don’t feel inclined to do any more of these 😀
Indeed, I think I won’t be attempting that again any time soon. If ever!
how well we understand one another 😁
I think it’s good that the word “vampire” wasn’t there but the presence of one is powerfully felt. Lestat is irrestible, isn’t he?
Very hot, David.
I loved Louis & Lestat 💕
Thanks, Dolly.
❤
David
I do too, and the rest of the gang as well, especially Marius. But then I am crazy about everything Italian.
You are very welcome, David.
😻
It always amazes me the way each person views the same set of words through different filters and comes to unique combinations! This one says more about you than about the magnetic set!
So this says that I never grew out of young adulthood? 😉
That love bite 🦇🧛!!!
I went into this thinking there was a vampire set added, but you composed this really well out of a challenging orginal set David, with the steamy paths leading onto the violent twist at the end!
Yeah – I really wish the word ‘vampire’ was in the set – that would have made it so much easier, Deb! Or even – ‘suck’ or ‘drink’ – but… no. I had to work around that 😀
You are very kind.
Thank you,
David
I don’t like vampires. And usually don’t talk about it. Youtube has so many videos on it. It violates our mind.
What do you think of them?
I like them a lot, Lokesh!
Sorry to disappoint you 🤪
-David
It’s normal. We may have different interests, likes and dislikes. But your poem is an art and I love art and artists.
Appreciate your work.👍
🥰
Amazing, David! I enjoyed the twist. A vampire love where only death unites them? Swoon.
But, seriously, I really did enjoy the turn you took at the end and how it aligns with the poem overall. Very immersing, sensual, and consuming. I would say this is steamy too, but vampires are undead so I don’t think they’d get too warm. 😁
Fantastic poem!
Well, I assume the human’s body was producing heat up until the end! 🩸
Thanks so much, Lucy – I really appreciate it. This is definitely not the sort of thing that I usually write, but fantasy books and movies have been part of my identity since my youth! I still remember how much I loved the sexy Anne Rice series – I read every single one of those books!
❤
David
Awesome!
Thanks, Lance!
🧛♂️
David
I found this poem fascinating
Molly,
I must admit that I wasn’t expecting that comment! Thank you! “Fascinating”? Well, I’ll bet the vampire’s prey thought that her lover was pretty fascinating too! 🧛♂️
Sincerely,
David
I don’t appreciate the vampire art photography. It does gel with the Tanka though.
But generally not my kinda read. It started out so well.
I’m a sucker for let me see beneath your beautiful.
Sorry David…
Still great composing.
Different strokes for different folks, Abi. I’ve always loved fantasy novels and vampires in particular! 🧛♂️
Don’t worry though ~ it’s not a theme that I’m going to stick with ~ just something that I decided to play with this time around!
❤
David
That’s true…
You can’t please everyone all the time.
Freedom is so important for the creative process, the genres are your playground
I believe you David 🙂
Excellent piece.
Thanks so much, Gabriela – I deeply appreciate your words.
Sincerely,
David
My pleasure 🌹
Wow! Your sexy vampire poem is quite impactful for a brief tanka. Thank you for sharing your process of creating the poem. I found it very interesting. ❤ Have a great week, David!
you too, Cheryl❣️
thank you!
David
Some steamy vampirism going on here, David!
I know! 🔥🧛♀️🔥