withapparatuson head, bare arm and fingers,
aching man's tongue pants,
chants soaring worship language
to need's elaborate beat
Notes
For this poem, I decided to stick with the ‘Original Set’ on the Magnetic Poetry website, as I did for my sexy vampire poem last time;
Having used this same set just recently, it was easier for me to find words that were compatible with one another at the first;
Actually, I pulled a lot of words out of the set that did not make their ways into the poem at all, but I wanted to see all of them together before deciding which ones to use;
As I’ve written before, the extra two lines (14 syllables) provide me with a greater challenge, as well as with a larger canvas for my word-brush;
I searched for and found the featured image of the phylacteries on a man’s arm at the start, as soon as I decided to make use of the words ‘apparatus’,‘arm’ and ‘fingers’;
I felt this to be important because many of my readers don’t know what Jewish tefillin (i.e. phylacteries) are, nor what they look like;
From the perspective of writing universally appealing poetry, this is clearly not a very relatable thing to write about, but, as Mark Twain said, “Write what you know.”
wow David; following your example, I have just created my first experimental haiku with the magnets – whereas previously I failed to share an attempt at one in any shape or form, this one worked – a little: At least I was able to she the link in a wp post. The theme is a continued one – a child without religion full of hope, not knowing in what…
👏 Barbara 👏
Could you please share the link to that poem?
… thought I had, let me check… 🙂
yes it’s up on my blog solitary … celebrate herat – first magnetic poem 🙂
It’s really good ~ you’re a natural!
go away – you have me blushing; thank you, Dsvid. 🙂
❤
I like how this magnetic poetry can cause unusual phrases. “aching man’s tongue pants” is one of those kind of lines that made me stop and re-read it, to make sure I saw it correctly. And what an image it conjures!
Yeah, Magnetic Poetry really makes you think about what you’re trying to get across within those very strict limitations – many words that you might want to use – simply don’t exist in the set at all!
Thanks, Dave!
-David
(chants soaring worship language
to need’s elaborate beat)
This is just some kinda wonderful poetry
Need’s elaborate beat – what a prayer , all encompassing
I simply love the reminder and influence of Phylacteries
🙏🤍 Abi 🤍🙏
I saw “aching man’s tongue pants” and my first thought was “Whoa, whose tongue is in whose pants during davening?!” and “what kind of shul is this?!”
And then I re-read the poem and I realized that was not at all what your meant.
🤡 JYP 🤡
That’s standard here in Israel!
I have been to shul in Israel (Tel Aviv and Ma’ale Adumim) and I did not witness any of that.
Ritual life is constantly developing, you know.
Ha!
This is very cool, and I also loved the factoid about the mindfulness-aiding prayer apparatus. Side note: it’s also always nice if one can claim a “my sexy vampire poem” in one’s roster. 😂🙌 :)) xoxo
wow David; following your example, I have just created my first experimental haiku with the magnets – whereas previously I failed to share an attempt at one in any shape or form, this one worked – a little: At least I was able to she the link in a wp post. The theme is a continued one – a child without religion full of hope, not knowing in what…
👏 Barbara 👏
Could you please share the link to that poem?
… thought I had, let me check… 🙂
yes it’s up on my blog solitary … celebrate herat – first magnetic poem 🙂
It’s really good ~ you’re a natural!
go away – you have me blushing; thank you, Dsvid. 🙂
❤
I like how this magnetic poetry can cause unusual phrases. “aching man’s tongue pants” is one of those kind of lines that made me stop and re-read it, to make sure I saw it correctly. And what an image it conjures!
Yeah, Magnetic Poetry really makes you think about what you’re trying to get across within those very strict limitations – many words that you might want to use – simply don’t exist in the set at all!
Thanks, Dave!
-David
(chants soaring worship language
to need’s elaborate beat)
This is just some kinda wonderful poetry
Need’s elaborate beat – what a prayer , all encompassing
I simply love the reminder and influence of Phylacteries
🙏🤍 Abi 🤍🙏
I saw “aching man’s tongue pants” and my first thought was “Whoa, whose tongue is in whose pants during davening?!” and “what kind of shul is this?!”
And then I re-read the poem and I realized that was not at all what your meant.
🤡 JYP 🤡
That’s standard here in Israel!
I have been to shul in Israel (Tel Aviv and Ma’ale Adumim) and I did not witness any of that.
Ritual life is constantly developing, you know.
Ha!
This is very cool, and I also loved the factoid about the mindfulness-aiding prayer apparatus. Side note: it’s also always nice if one can claim a “my sexy vampire poem” in one’s roster. 😂🙌 :)) xoxo
indeed❣️
Thanks, Lia❣️
Keep writing✍️🌄.
🙏
Wonderful!
🤍 Dolly 🤍
you’re getting so good at this! 💖
you mean praying? 😉
Writing but praying is a great add on as well!!!
🤡
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