Sevenling (I am such)
My 1st sevenling
I am such a friggin' Jew; circumcised; born
in and residing in the capital of Israel; always,
always walking around with a yarmulke.
I don't compose poetry in Hebrew; I
don't hate; I have difficulty believing in my One
True God, let alone in any foreign ones.
I am just as different as I am.
I discovered the ‘sevenling’ form on Ron Lavalette’s blog, and I just had to give it a go! (this probably won’t be my last one)
It’s good to accept yourself for what you are!
I do try, Ingrid. I do.
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David
The solitary seventh line is a KO
😘 Abi 😘
Sevenling…. interesting. It’s great how you try new forms of poetry. Thank you for writing
Thank you for reading, Sangeetha – I deeply value you.
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David
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I really like the tone of this one and subject 🙂 PS my non-native tongue trips up at the rhythm of born… wants to say ‘born and residing in… Don’t know what that is about. And now I am looking forward to hear the frigging Jew writing about hating as well 🙂 Lovely poem, thank you David 🙂
🤗 Barbara 🤗
Introspective, revealing, humorous, and perfectly true to the Sevenling form. Awesome work.
I can almost guarantee that you have more sevenlings to compose. Don’t say i didn’t warn you.
And thanks for the shout-out.
I sort of both hate and love you for introducing me to these, Ron.
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David
Your honesty and authenticity come through clearly in this poem. And the last line gave me that jolt I get when I read a great sentence. The kind that resonates in your mind, like music that connects with you.
Wow, I take that as high praise coming from you, Dave.
Thank you so much,
David
As are we all, and if only we could allow it to be. (K)
Indeed. You know, Kerfe, that last line was going to end with “as you are” … and then ~ it didn’t.
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David
It was communicated even without the words appearing. Good poetry does that.
Another interesting form of poetry. I like your take on it.
Thanks so much as always, Lauren ❤
Yours,
David
The sevenling is a great and fun form. This one feels very raw and honest… almost uncomfortably so.
I actually felt uncomfortable writing, uncomfortable looking for a picture for it, deeply uncomfortable publishing it…
You’re unsurprisingly perceptive, Muri.
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David
Probably won’t be your last? I certainly hope not. It’s a pleasure watching you playing with these forms. You’re well suited to this, my friend. Exploring these different structures and styles. You’re like a kid at play but with the skill of an artist.
You are truly kind, George.
Humbled,
David
Nor should it be your last ~~~ this is not an easy form, you mastered it first time out.
Thank you so very, very much, Helen.
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David
Happy passover
Thank you, Leenda ❤
Here in Israel, it just ended, but in the diaspora it will end on Sunday night!
Tomorrow I can drink whiskey again!
All best,
David
YAY!!!!!
We are all a mess of contradictions, aren’t we?
Well done with the sevenling! I know Ron loves them.
Yes, I know that I am, Merril, and I assume that I’m no more or less human than anybody else…
Much love,
David
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Sometimes it is hard to believe in the invisible. Nevertheless we tell the story of deliverance.
Sevenling is an attractive, concise, form. Kudos on your driving it home.
Danial, your comments are so often poetic in and of themselves. Thank you!
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David
This really hit me, and it would take an entire blog post to explain why. Hm. If I decide to do that, may I link to your poem?
First of all, I’m intrigued by the sevenling form and will check that out.
But you also know I’m in the process of conversion, and so I see things so much differently from someone born into not only a religion but a culture. That’s both a blessing and a curse. The whole poem jarred that for me, but I have to say the phrase “I don’t hate” just stopped me in my tracks. I’m not sure what you meant by that, but I know how I read it. Thank you for the thought process…
M., please feel free to link to anything I write – you don’t need my permission. And I would definitely love to exchange thoughts and impressions with you over things like this. I’m a big Jewish dork like that 🙃
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David
Thank you, for both. I do worry that in my clumsy way (and I keep being told that I’m overly blunt) that I will inadvertently offend. That would be the furthest thing from my intent. It would be wrestling with my thoughts, and sigh, yeah, sometimes probably poorly stated. So that’s my disclaimer. ♥
go for it. I look fwd to reading your thoughts!
Your honesty and bravery to be vulnerable is commendable David! 🌷
Thanks so much for your kind support, Cindy. It means a great deal to me.
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David
You’re so welcome David!!! It’s so easy to dol
‘I am just as different as I am.’
Mind blown at that line! So loaded, so many possibilities/directions spinning from just 8 simple words! Love it!
Thanks so much, Sybo. I really appreciate your kind support!
Sincerely,
David
I love this. My favorite lines were “I am such a friggin’ Jew” and ” I have difficulty believing in my One / True God, let alone in any foreign ones.”
🤗 JYP 🤗
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