Circumcised, or: Barely

Sevenling (I am such)

My 1st sevenling

I am such a friggin' Jew; circumcised; born 
in and residing in the capital of Israel; always,
always walking around with a yarmulke.

I don't compose poetry in Hebrew; I 
don't hate; I have difficulty believing in my One 
True God, let alone in any foreign ones.

I am just as different as I am.

I discovered the ‘sevenling’ form on Ron Lavalette’s blog, and I just had to give it a go! (this probably won’t be my last one)

44 thoughts on “Circumcised, or: Barely”

  1. Sevenling…. interesting. It’s great how you try new forms of poetry. Thank you for writing

  2. I really like the tone of this one and subject πŸ™‚ PS my non-native tongue trips up at the rhythm of born… wants to say ‘born and residing in… Don’t know what that is about. And now I am looking forward to hear the frigging Jew writing about hating as well πŸ™‚ Lovely poem, thank you David πŸ™‚

  3. Introspective, revealing, humorous, and perfectly true to the Sevenling form. Awesome work.
    I can almost guarantee that you have more sevenlings to compose. Don’t say i didn’t warn you.

    And thanks for the shout-out.

  4. Your honesty and authenticity come through clearly in this poem. And the last line gave me that jolt I get when I read a great sentence. The kind that resonates in your mind, like music that connects with you.

    1. I actually felt uncomfortable writing, uncomfortable looking for a picture for it, deeply uncomfortable publishing it…

      You’re unsurprisingly perceptive, Muri.

      ❀
      David

  5. Probably won’t be your last? I certainly hope not. It’s a pleasure watching you playing with these forms. You’re well suited to this, my friend. Exploring these different structures and styles. You’re like a kid at play but with the skill of an artist.

    1. Thank you, Leenda ❀

      Here in Israel, it just ended, but in the diaspora it will end on Sunday night!
      Tomorrow I can drink whiskey again!

      All best,
      David

  6. Sometimes it is hard to believe in the invisible. Nevertheless we tell the story of deliverance.
    Sevenling is an attractive, concise, form. Kudos on your driving it home.

  7. This really hit me, and it would take an entire blog post to explain why. Hm. If I decide to do that, may I link to your poem?

    First of all, I’m intrigued by the sevenling form and will check that out.

    But you also know I’m in the process of conversion, and so I see things so much differently from someone born into not only a religion but a culture. That’s both a blessing and a curse. The whole poem jarred that for me, but I have to say the phrase “I don’t hate” just stopped me in my tracks. I’m not sure what you meant by that, but I know how I read it. Thank you for the thought process…

    1. M., please feel free to link to anything I write – you don’t need my permission. And I would definitely love to exchange thoughts and impressions with you over things like this. I’m a big Jewish dork like that πŸ™ƒ

      ❀
      David

      1. Thank you, for both. I do worry that in my clumsy way (and I keep being told that I’m overly blunt) that I will inadvertently offend. That would be the furthest thing from my intent. It would be wrestling with my thoughts, and sigh, yeah, sometimes probably poorly stated. So that’s my disclaimer. β™₯

  8. […] David fires off a poem that just stops me. He did it with his sevenling (another new form to me) I am such, and that prompted me to start this post. Then while still pondering that poem, he popped out […]

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