Poison words, or: Wake up kiss

A ‘Magnetic Poem’ tanka

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but my god decayed
into warm liquid fish eyes
broken lips smoking
breathed poison words over me
melting into wake up kiss


  • For this poem, I decided to make use of the ‘Poet Set’ on the Magnetic Poetry website for the second time;
  • This poem was, in part, inspired by my personal descent into religious skepticism, which I spent many years trying to avoid;
  • I once again opted for a tanka, rather than a haiku;
    • The extra two lines (14 syllables) provide a greater challenge, as well as a larger canvas;
    • I’ve really taken to writing magnetic tankas;
  • I searched for and found the featured image only after I had written the entire tanka;
    • I really wanted to find a free use image of a pile of fish eyes, but, unfortunately, I couldn’t.

23 thoughts on “Poison words, or: Wake up kiss”

  1. Wow. That first line,

    “My god decayed…”

    Powerful imagery and philosophical angst slippered in poetic mocassins tredding a unique path, David.๐Ÿ‘๐Ÿ‘

    Very creative and thought-provoking๐ŸŒŸ

    1. I really think magnetic poetry is a fantastic exercise – it requires greater flexibility of thought for me, and it produces images that I would never otherwise have thought of.

      Thanks so much, Muri.


    1. that’s interesting, Ingrid. I hadn’t really thought about it because I don’t tend to compare…

      Now that I reflect upon it, I think others tend to write free verse poetry with the magnets, whereas I tend to go for tankas.

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