My 1st Shadorma
Snippet of ~
Of our sure, full love ~
Chirps above,
Silky gloves ~
Push could never come to shove,
For we're so in love
I was recently exposed to the shadorma form of poetry by Kerfe and Lauren. As always, I had to give it a go… this is definitely one of those short forms that challenges us to pack as much as possible into every word. Quite lovely, really – I enjoyed this one!
Note: the form need not rhyme.
Thank you for the introduction to this form. I had not heard of it before.
You poem packs in a lot of wonderful imagery in a tiny real estate. I like it!👍👍😊
Thank you, my friend. 🧸
My pleasure, my friend 🙏
Love it. So smoothly flowing creation.
Thanks, Lokesh!
Hate rymes, mostly I prefer alliteration and onamatapea- and a decent spell check with wordpress does not seem to have.
I like to play with those too, Andrew 😀
Lovely. Haven’t heard of the form before. Will definitely check it out. You make it sound quite natural.
It’s not Hobbo award level writing, but I do my best 🤡
🙂 He can only choose one blog at a time. It must be big decision making time for he and Dauphy. You may be next! I am always impressed with your attention to structure. I like the challenge of it occasionally but more often I do my own thing. And I’m amazed what you get out of those magnetic poems. Sense and beauty! I just get frustrated. 😀
I like doing my own thing too, but these forms fascinate me – I always find myself wondering… what would a particular form do to my intended meaning? What am I missing by not attempting to use a form? I mean, I know nothing about poetry, but real poets have created these forms for some reason, right? There must be something to them…
How do you know I don’t also get frustrated? 😉
❤
David
You may get frustrated but you persist. I have a cyber tantrum and virtually defenestrate the tiny digital magnet words. 😉
A lovely job, David. I like where you went with it.
💕 Lauren 💕
I like the poem. I’ve never heard of this form of poetry before. Thank you for sharing.
Thank you, Molly ~ I’d never heard of it either, until just this week! That’s what makes it so much fun for me 😀
Yours,
David
Wonderfully done, David. Epic lines.
💞 Yassy 💞
❣️ David ❣️
I enjoyed it as well. As a reader, I mean. Once again your exploration of differing forms is remarkable. I really am glad you do this, David. I am learning so much about poetry around the world while enjoying the writing of a talented man.
Thanks, George. For me, these forms are like a map towards figuring out how to express myself effectively.
playing with them is a bit like going on an adventure and having lots of side quests along the way 😀
Yours,
David
Ha! I love it! That is a great way to describe it.
I used to play a lot of D&D
No wonder! So did I. I thought I recognized the language. Hard for anyone to mention a quest without me slipping back in time to those days.
This is so lovely, David!
Thank you so much, Plakshi.
❤
David
Nice to see you have a go at all different forms of poetry❤️🤗
🤗 Diana 🤗
I like the Shadorma – I think of it as the Spanish version of the Tanka!
You’re so full of information, Muri! I didn’t realize that it was Spanish in origin 🙂
Thank you for sharing! I’ve been introduced to a form be new writers.
I’m glad you enjoyed it!
❤
David
Those last 2 lines are great. It’s interesting that the rhymes aren’t obvious. I like that too. (K)
💝 Kerfe 💝
I love this one. Every word does well in it. Yes this is what good love is like. Beautifully said David!
💕 Lia 💕
Hi David, Thanks for sharing this form of poetry. It is new to me, and looks like something that I can work with.
I’m just passing it along, Mark – it was totally new to me too! 😀
Shabbat shalom,
David
This is definitely lovely! I had no idea about this particular form. Good to know new stuff from you, as always 💜☺
Yeah, it’s super fun, Shruba ❤