Chirps above, or: Silky gloves

My 1st Shadorma

Snippet of ~
Of our sure, full love ~
Chirps above,
Silky gloves ~
Push could never come to shove,
For we're so in love

I was recently exposed to the shadorma form of poetry by Kerfe and Lauren. As always, I had to give it a go… this is definitely one of those short forms that challenges us to pack as much as possible into every word. Quite lovely, really – I enjoyed this one!

Note: the form need not rhyme.

40 thoughts on “Chirps above, or: Silky gloves”

  1. Thank you for the introduction to this form. I had not heard of it before.
    You poem packs in a lot of wonderful imagery in a tiny real estate. I like it!πŸ‘πŸ‘πŸ˜Š

      1. πŸ™‚ He can only choose one blog at a time. It must be big decision making time for he and Dauphy. You may be next! I am always impressed with your attention to structure. I like the challenge of it occasionally but more often I do my own thing. And I’m amazed what you get out of those magnetic poems. Sense and beauty! I just get frustrated. πŸ˜€

        1. I like the challenge of it occasionally but more often I do my own thing.

          I like doing my own thing too, but these forms fascinate me – I always find myself wondering… what would a particular form do to my intended meaning? What am I missing by not attempting to use a form? I mean, I know nothing about poetry, but real poets have created these forms for some reason, right? There must be something to them…

          I just get frustrated.

          How do you know I don’t also get frustrated? πŸ˜‰

          ❀
          David

  2. I enjoyed it as well. As a reader, I mean. Once again your exploration of differing forms is remarkable. I really am glad you do this, David. I am learning so much about poetry around the world while enjoying the writing of a talented man.

    1. Thanks, George. For me, these forms are like a map towards figuring out how to express myself effectively.

      playing with them is a bit like going on an adventure and having lots of side quests along the way πŸ˜€

      Yours,
      David

        1. No wonder! So did I. I thought I recognized the language. Hard for anyone to mention a quest without me slipping back in time to those days.

  3. I love this one. Every word does well in it. Yes this is what good love is like. Beautifully said David!

  4. This is definitely lovely! I had no idea about this particular form. Good to know new stuff from you, as always πŸ’œβ˜Ί

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