Limits of reality, or: Word fish

My first bagua poem

rim where water licks surface air above rim
side invisible but known existence only this side
cornered word fish always turns to next corner
edges clear to big shapes peering through edges

side through which small sails visible before side
edging in through hollow plastic hull near edge
corner plant stiff and also in another corner
bottom covered by many colors all over bottom

My friend Suzette introduced me to the bagua form of poetry so, of course, I had to give it a go!

32 thoughts on “Limits of reality, or: Word fish”

  1. Okay… How did you write such a brilliant poem, keeping the word limit to 64 words?!! ๐Ÿ˜ฎ๐Ÿ‘๐Ÿ‘๐ŸŒŸ๐ŸŒŸ

  2. Another poem form!
    Considering strong word limits, you still worked a lot of visual details of an aquarium life into this nice poem David. Only the air bubbles are missing ๐Ÿ˜Š

  3. This makes me think fondly of my daughter’s beta fish, Bubbles and Rainbow, sadly too short-lived.
    And this form is one I will have to try. Maybe it will inspire me to get back to my beach I Ching series, something I keep meaning to do. (K)

    1. I have no idea what your ‘beach I Ching’ series is, Kerfe, but I pretty much look forward to anything and everything you create and share.

      โค
      David

      1. It’s something I did when Nina and I were posting regularly on memadtwo. Everytime I go to the beach I take photos of shells and driftwood in random I Ching arrangements and I would look them up one at a time and then do a collage and poem. I have many many photos I haven’t used yet. Maybe by the summer I can get back to it.

  4. madmetwo’s mention of the ‘beach I Ching’ series David reminds me I must do more work on my ‘wing, wang, dong’ series. Someone said I’d already started….dunno?

    Re what you did I must congratulate you. It looks a challenge. I can well appreciate the fun and reward it gave you. Pity you missed the bubbles..oh well, next time….

    1. Thanks, Don ๐Ÿ˜€

      Regarding this particular poem, the form of it just made me think – ‘box’ – and, from there, it wasn’t a far cry to get to ‘fish tank’… the form sort of lent itself to the subject in this case. And, yes, it’s too bad about the bubbles…

      โค
      David

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