My 1st kimo
Night envelopes; penetrates; becoming;
Absent moon leaves empty space;
Thoughts sparkle among stars
What’s a kimo?
According to this website, kimo poems are an Israeli 🇮🇱 version of haiku. Apparently, there was a need for more syllables in Hebrew. That said, most of the rules are still familiar:
- 3 lines.
- No rhymes.
- 10 syllables in the first line, 7 in the second, and 6 in the third.
Also, the kimo is focused on a single frozen image (kind of like a snapshot). So it’s uncommon to have any movement happening in kimo poems.
Thank you for sharing 🙏🙏🙏
Hi, the website in your paragraph didn’t connect. Here it is. https://www.writersdigest.com/write-better-poetry/kimo-poetic-form
It doesn’t work from my iPhone
it seems like their website is down – I can’t access it on my computer either 😦
Ohh. Too bad
thanks!
Lovely
Thanks so much, Nick!
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David
Gorgeous poem, David! “Thoughts sparkle among the stars.” So beautiful and captures the imagination! ❤
Take care!
💛 Cheryl 💛
This one is stunning David. Not a wasted image or word. (K)
🥰 Thank you, Kerfe 🥰
Great job with a new form to add to your collection!
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Cindy – thank you.
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David
My treasured pleasure!
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Keep writing
Thank you, DP. I intend to – I get a huge amount of strength from it.
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David
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This is beautiful David.
🤗 Lauren 🤗
Beautiful. ❤️
💝 Jeff 💝
It makes me long to jump into that photo. Skillfully wrought, David.
Wow, TPS, I take that as a high compliment! Thank you. I really appreciate it.
Yours,
David
Can I ask where that photo is of? Thank you for writing and sharing, David.
The photo is a free photo that I found searching for images on Google – I didn’t take it. I wanted a photo of a night sky without a moon, and of all the free photos I found, this one drew me the most.
It looks like a magical place! What a find! Sure makes a change from city streets in SF.
it’s quite a change from city streets in Jerusalem too 😀
I wish I could visit. I suppose the Jerusalem of my mind is surrounded by hills and beautiful landscape. I never really think about the reality I suppose.
both realities are true – Jerusalem is beautiful, and there are hills and beautiful landscape (particularly around Jerusalem), but it’s also a major city with some very poor urban neighborhoods.
One day I hope I can see for myself.
I’ll be happy to buy you a coffee 🙂
That is very kind. Thank you for not judging me harshly.
I wrote a poem about judgmentalness once too –
I no longer eat meat – I’m vegan, but looking at the cholent post made me long for my grandmother and her food in a way that brought back an old memory of her chiding my grandfather while she served the meal, all I could remember were the words “shtik fleisch”….I thought, as a child she was talking about the meal! It is so good to think of them.
FWIW, that is a photo of veggie cholent – and it’s not uncommon 🙂
No meat in there! That’s it, I am going to stop being so stubborn and make some in my slow cooker for myself!
if you search for it, you can find tons of veggie cholent recipes online
I might even post a photo or two! Thank you!
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Love this one!! I always thought the Kimo was a good intermediate step to the severe restriction of the haiku…
I think you may have been the one to mention the kimo on one of my other blog posts, Muri. Were you?
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David
Beautiful, David.
Thank you, my friend.
Beautiful poetry..♥️
*hugs*
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