My 1st puente
In the form of two envelope quintets
This heart has no other blood known than flowed through all past generations linked one-by-one through space and time by ancient Hebrew conversations echoing through flesh and bone ~ ever more so as I've grown ~ This mind has grasped that nothing's known though men cling tight to correlations creating of them gods sublime and altars built on false foundations they worship while I stand alone
d’Verse poetics prompt:
Build a bridge
At d’Verse, poets were instructed to either:
- Write a poem about bridges that uses some form of the word ‘bridge’ in the poem or in the title, or:
- Write a puente (bridge) poem, which does not need to include the word bridge (but it can).
I opted for the 2nd alternative, and decided to make my puente poem out of two envelope quintets. Given the rhyme structure of my poem, I envision it as a suspension bridge.
This is deeply profound! I especially love; “creating of them gods sublime and altars built on false foundations, they worship while I stand alone.”๐๐
Much love to you, Sanaa.
Thank you,
David
A short poem of unfathomable depth. I love the way poetry and poets work.
Thanks so much, Sean.
All best,
David
yesher koach.
todah.
There are so many threads that pull at us. And yet we must be the bridge between all of them. (K)
You know, Kerfe, I think if I were to go back and write all of your comments to me on all of my poems, one line after another, that would be very poetic.
That’s such a nice thing to say David. I often find comments inspiring myself. You always have some good threads of them in your comments section.
love you correlation and heart and mind expressed here and constantly questioning as you stand on your own 2 feet David
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Thank you so much, Cindy โค
You're very kind, as always.
Yours,
David
You’re so welcome and most deserved.
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I have similar thoughts, how I’m anchored in the tradition of a church, but cannot make myself blindly believe.
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Oh this excels! The link between what our spirit tell us all along versus what men have said. And knowing only you alone can choose with whom to listen.
Thanks so much, Ravienne โค
I really appreciate the wisdom of your comment.
Sincerely,
David
a brilliant puente poem – from the multitudes to the personal.
“inked one-by-one through space and time” – this line too is a bridge unto itself
Much love, Laura. Thank you.
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David
[…] opted for the 2nd alternative. With thanks to David at https://skepticskaddish.com/2021/04/28/this-heart-or-this-mind/ for inspiring me, encouraging me and introducing me to d’Verse and new forms of poetry. This […]
A very nice bridging–heart and mind, personal and cultural. I had to look up the envelope quintet. Thanks for participating, David!
Thanks for being an awesome host, Merril โค
Yours,
David
You’re very welcome, David!
A wonderful puente. I loved both quintets, but the second one truly resonated with me, especially ‘nothing’s known
though men cling tight to correlations’
Thanks so much, Ron โค
I really appreciate your kind feedback.
Sincerely,
David
I love your “first puente”! โค You definitely know how to build bridges. Bravo David! ๐๐๐๐๐๐
Thank you so much, Filipa.
You are very sweet.
Sincerely,
David
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