My 1st ‘waltz wave’
Sit-
ting here,
con-
sider-
ing my words,
while count-
ing
all my
syllables
is fairly re-
laxing for
me. Al-
most
medi-
tative, I
would say.
Waves
are calm-
ing.
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I break up words for syllable count often, but I don’t generally use hyphens. They add to your verse though, and do slow it down into a gentle rhythm. (K)
I was just trying to work with the form, Kerfe… and hyphens felt natural to me. Maybe I was not brave enough yet to split up words in a less conformist way 🙂
I think the way you did it was just right for the feeling you were trying to create.
Can’t even explain why, mate, but I love this. It IS calming. Ha!
😁 George 😁
I like the deliberate way you constructed this piece.
🤍 Dee 🤍
Wow, that’s awesome, David. Calming indeed. ❤
😊 Jeff 😊
You achieved the intent of a wave of words to lull the reader into a relaxed state! Now I need to go nap….
LOL
stuttery
I really like the picture! 🙂
So original and relatable. I absolutely love this piece.❤️
💖 Grace 💖
Thank you for taking me to the shore with your beautiful verse, David 💖
🤗 Diana 🤗
Never seen one of these but I think I get it: nice flow 🌊
I was just SURFING and discovered it today.
👏🏻👏🏻👏🏻
🏄♂️
An interesting arrangement of splitting the words, and I found that it slowed my reading — for my brain to connect the words. It’s a neat way to create a different flow in a poem. And I agree: waves are certainly calming 🙂
Yes, they are, Dave.
And thank you – I agree with you about the hyphens… that’s why I included them in the title of the poem 🙂
Sincerely,
David
Lovely picture and poem.
Thank you, kind sir 🙂
❤
David
You’re welcome, dear friend ♥️
~Jay
😘 M Jay 😘
Serene poetry. 🌹
💐 Amber 💐
“This form seems to educe a soothing cadence as the lines gently increase and decrease…”
This is so cool, like the words are given an actual ability to move to and fro radiating a sense of catharsis. Beautifully penned!
Thanks so much, D. 🤗
❤
David
Of course!