My 2nd kimo
No breeze 'pon long leaves reaching t'ward bright skies
Turbulent waters nurture
Providing all but light
What’s a kimo?
According to this website, kimo poems are an Israeli ๐ฎ๐ฑ version of haiku. Apparently, there was a need for more syllables in Hebrew. That said, most of the rules are still familiar:
- 3 lines.
- No rhymes.
- 10 syllables in the first line, 7 in the second, and 6 in the third.
Also, the kimo is focused on a single frozen image (kind of like a snapshot). So it’s uncommon to have any movement happening in kimo poems.
The Skeptic's Kaddish ๐ฎ๐ฑ 
That would be an experience to remember, and so you have. A whole other world but one that calls to us I think. (K)
It was so many years ago… nearly a quarter of a century… but the image of the kelp has stayed with me.
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Wonderfully descriptive David…takes me to the kelp forests of South Africa and the award winning, documentary, “My Octopus Teacher”
I haven’t seen that documentary, Karima ~ would you recommend it?
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David
Oh yes..a thousand times…Yes!!! Let me know what you thought of it:)
I will ๐
Lovely descriptive “snapshot” and I love the last line!!
๐ Muri ๐
Fantastic Kimo. Fabulously creative.. I am wowed.
๐ฅฐ Yassy ๐ฅฐ
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[…] This is my first attempt at a kimo. An Israeli version of a haiku. I am learning from David again at: https://skepticskaddish.com/2021/05/03/enchanted-or-kelp-forest/ […]
Wonderful. I had not heard of this form. Thank you!
โค Suzette โค
Have you ever been to the Monterey Bay Aquarium in California? That’s what this one reminds me of.
No, I haven’t, but I went scuba diving with my Dad once near SF – and we swam through kelp there!
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David
Actually – it might have been Monterey Bay where we were scuba diving…
It’s a beautiful area all along the coast there – scuba diving must have been an incredible experience!
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๐ค DP ๐ค
beautiful photo
Susan,
It’s a free stock photo I found on Google Images ๐
Although, that said, my father and I once went scuba diving near SF, and we went through a kelp forest much like this one!
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David