Laugh, or: Die

A ‘Magnetic Poem’ tanka

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broken man must laugh
delicious caramel voice
like magic poison
his lips drink of her rhythms
as haunted heart slowly decays

Notes

  • For this poem, I decided to make use of the ‘Poet Set’ on the Magnetic Poetry website;
  • This piece is entirely fictional;
    • I’ve never been divorced – this is merely a product of my imagination rendering a divorced man that is still madly in love with his wife;
  • I once again opted for a tanka, rather than a haiku;
    • The extra two lines (14 syllables) provide a greater challenge, as well as a larger canvas;
  • I searched for and found the featured image only after I had written the entire tanka.

FYI:

Festival of Shavuot (Pentecost)

The Jewish festival of Shavuot began at sunset on Sunday and ends at sunset on Monday. In terms of religious restrictions, this festival is similar to Shabbat (the Sabbath). Therefore, I have scheduled some blog posts (including this one) to go up in the meantime – I hope you enjoy them!

28 thoughts on “Laugh, or: Die”

  1. This is a very interesting poem. As someone who also has not been divorced I can see the emotion you have intended to imbue the words with. Thank you for sharing.

  2. The prisoner of porcelain kisses
    Devours caramel woman
    When universe lingering
    Brilliant picturing
    sky born
    breezes melt
    marble. (TPS)

  3. Beautiful as ever, mate. Just the theme of it and the fantastic pairing of words–i know this is restricted by the magnets and all, but this is flowing so smoothly, it would be a pleasure to see it continue. You are really talented at this.

    1. I had no idea what this poem would be about until I started pulling the magnets together, George.

      Thank you, friend ❤

      -David

  4. I think the line “delicious caramel voice” is a great juxtaposition to the brokenness of the rest of the poem – caramel stretches and oozes but never breaks…

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