Blue, or: Very lonely renga

Posted on May 27, 2021May 27, 2021 by ben Alexander

lonely haiku cloud
seeking companion verses
knows nothing but blue
imaginary soulmate
offers kind lines of comfort

cautiously hopeful
small cloud responds in renga
alas, daydream passed

33 thoughts on “Blue, or: Very lonely renga”

lssattitudeofgratitude June 9, 202104:32 Reply

And my heart went pitter pat
1. ben Alexander June 9, 202109:14 Reply
  
  Awwwww….🥰
Thattamma C.G Menon May 31, 202102:52 Reply

Awesome blue sky and the poem 👌🙏🌷
1. ben Alexander May 31, 202107:21 Reply
  
  ✨🙏✨ Thattamma ✨🙏✨
  
  -David
  1. Thattamma C.G Menon May 31, 202115:08 Reply
    
    🌹🙏🌹
memadtwo May 28, 202104:29 Reply

Alas is just the right word. (K)
1. ben Alexander May 28, 202106:32 Reply
  
  I particularly like how it sounds at the start of the line with the word ‘passed’ at the end of the line 🙂
  1. memadtwo May 28, 202112:44 Reply
    
    I agree. A good pairing.
Jeff Flesch May 28, 202103:03 Reply

Lovely, David. ☁️❤️
1. ben Alexander May 28, 202106:31 Reply
  
  💖 Jeff 💖
jewishyoungprofessional May 28, 202102:31 Reply

This reminds me of a personals ad. Lonely haiku cloud seeks same for long walks on the beach, etc.
1. ben Alexander May 28, 202106:30 Reply
  
  Yeah, except the cloud ends up alone 😦
  1. jewishyoungprofessional May 28, 202108:20 Reply
    
    I know. Poor single cloud haiku. Dating sucks sometimes.
Ivan W. Lui May 27, 202118:54 Reply

Daaaaaaaamn. Loved it
1. ben Alexander May 27, 202119:15 Reply
  
  Thanks so much, Ivan 😀
  
  All best,
  David
writingwhatnots May 27, 202116:09 Reply

Poor cloud 😦
1. ben Alexander May 27, 202116:54 Reply
  
  Marion, I know! 😦
murisopsis May 27, 202115:41 Reply

This hits very close to home as I’m in the throes of a failed Renga that is looking more and more like a solo effort!!
1. ben Alexander May 27, 202116:53 Reply
  
  Muri, I’d be more than happy to renga with you!
  
  ❤
  David
Suzette Benjamin May 27, 202115:00 Reply

Love it! First line…powerful
1. ben Alexander May 27, 202116:52 Reply
  
  💘 🧸 💘
Ingrid May 27, 202113:18 Reply

Beautiful ⛅️
1. ben Alexander May 27, 202113:20 Reply
  
  ✨🙏✨ Ingrid ✨🙏✨
Lokesh Sastya May 27, 202113:10 Reply

It depends how we think. For now, I’m happy and motivated so, I would like to draw a picture in the frame of the blue sky.
1. ben Alexander May 27, 202113:14 Reply
  
  😀 Lokesh 😀
  
  Tell me, how is your father feeling?
  
  ❤
  David
  1. Lokesh Sastya May 27, 202113:21 Reply
    
    He is fine. Although, it takes few months to get full recovery.
    
    My studies got disturbed. I’m preparing easy to follow schedule. With my poor experience in past 3-4 months, now, I’m more aware the present, and the way I have to give direction to my life.
    1. ben Alexander May 27, 202113:22 Reply
      
      I understand.
      I’m very glad that your father’s health is improving. 💖
Barbara S May 27, 202112:24 Reply

🙂
1. ben Alexander May 27, 202112:30 Reply
  
  It’s supposed to make you sad, Barbara, not make you smile 😉
  1. Barbara S May 27, 202112:31 Reply
    
    not working 🙂
    1. ben Alexander May 27, 202112:32 Reply
      
      alas, I’ve failed 😉
  2. Barbara S May 27, 202116:12 Reply
    
    giggle 🙂 – sorry my repertoire of emoji is limited 😦
    1. ben Alexander May 27, 202116:58 Reply
      
      here’s a giggle for you ~ 🤭