Hold your horses, or: Zigzag

Epistrophe + Anaphora = Symploce 

Hold your child's hand when you walk together
Upon crossing the street, keep together
Upon crossing paths with old folks make way
Teach her it's considerate to make way
Teach her to remember your phone numbers
Should she get lost she'll know your phone numbers
Should she let go of you she might zigzag
You might trip over her should she zigzag
You might worry she's growing up too fast
Hold your horses... you're growing up too fast

A d’Verse prompt:

‘To turn again, about turn again’

At d’Verse, we were challenged to write a poem using any style or meter as long as it contains:

1a. Epiphora (aka Epistrophe or Antistrophe). The end line repeats should, for the most part, be consecutive, although allowances are made for alternates as well as the use of the repeat word with variance. Employ repetitions with the maxim ‘too often is too heavy’!

AND those who like an extra challenge might like to add in some
 
1b. Symploce – the  combined use  of anaphora and epiphora.

66 thoughts on “Hold your horses, or: Zigzag”

  1. David,
    Oh this captures a parent’s dilemma so well. On the one hand, grow up, grow strong. On the other hand, not too fast, your Mother/Father isn’t ready. Not yet. Perfect use of repetitions too. Well done.
    Pax,
    Dora

  2. I’d almost like to see this laid out like a dialog- (or what’s that form with two columns each representing a different voice)– the parent and the child, and how they experience the same thing differently. Still very effective laid out as you have.

  3. It certainly feels that way sometimes David – everything is going too fast! Sometimes I have to try and actively slow my mind down…great parenting advice in these lines 🙂

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