Möbius trap

d’Verse prosery

… or end… noting the door at the far side of the… do she wondered? Those damned traps are… gingerly, she padded towards the glowing… this a clue? Cringing, she raised her hand towards the metal and traced… so crucial to finding the way is this… there is…

… no beginning or end… doesn’t matter, she thought to… knocked her to the floor, as the lights flashed… head hurt. Liquid streamed down her… this time. No way she… the door when she tripped over an… falling through the darkness, amidst the rubble… the cold stone wall…

… pulled herself up by the tips… That’s it, yes, that’s it – just a bit… see the… close. All she had to do was grab the handle… illusion! What? No! How could it… footing and flailed desperately to keep her… crucial to finding… the way is this… there is no beginning…


The prompt

d’Verse prosery is flash fiction with a beginning, a middle and an end, in any genre of the author’s choice, no longer than 144 words. This very short piece of prose must include an assigned line from a poem, within the 144 word limit. Writers may change the punctuation of the assigned line, but they may not insert words within the quotation.

The assigned quotation was:

Crucial to finding the way is this: there is no beginning or end.

Joy Harjo (b. 1951), ‘A Map to the Next World’

63 thoughts on “Möbius trap”

  1. David,
    This is like an abstract painting: a bit surreal and a bit recognizable, a puzzle that may or may not “work out” for the beholder.
    Pax,
    Dora

  2. Möbius indeed, David. I think you could have arranged this in any order. It’s like walking into someone’s nightmare, or as someone else commented, like a Twilight Zone episode. Nice!

  3. I really enjoyed the mystery of this … looking for clues and trying to find a way out. Felt like I was in a Twilight Zone episode (which I also enjoyed).

  4. Really great, David. I was thinking we had a somewhat similar idea. Mine didn’t involve a reference to Mobius, but you’ll understand when you see it. Your fragmented story and word order with the Mobius reference is pretty genius. 🙂

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