A schuttelreim
The beast stole forward, creeping slow
Soon puss would feast on sleeping crow
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of a son
I’m rooting for the cat! Although I feel a bit bad for the crow
he was just hungry, is all 😀
Fun! Maybe a bit gross too. 😆
I will (attempt to) add one to the mix:
To the kitchen the vegan did strut; she’ll not be eating crow
At the chopping block is where she’ll be, cutting eggplant
Love learning new poetic forms from you! 😄
Michele, that’s super cute, but it’s not a schuttelreim because the final two words of the two lines don’t rhyme – they’re not a spoonerism…
❤
David
Thanks teach! I realized that after the fact. Guess I am eating crow, with a fork, not a spoon! 😆 Here is my modified attempt, with a rhyming couplet~
From the garden she grows her meal, she culls evermore
To the kitchen the vegan does strut; she’ll not be eating crow
Eating crow is a tough one.
The spoonerism would sound like – creeting owe, but that doesn’t mean anything… Not all words have workable spoonerisms.
Oh, got it! Yeah, I did pluck a tough one! I will just go chop some veggies now. 🤪 Thank you for the schuttelreim lesson. 😁
Much love to you, Michele 💕
Thank you. Same to you, David. 💗 I just read what I wrote, that doesn’t even rhyme. I should not attempt rhyming (or chopping) before I have had a cup of coffee. 🤣 My schuttelreim sucks, but it has been fun. 😁
I just didn’t want you to feel slighted by me!
Never! Critique away. I created a schuttelreim mess! 😂 I will try again. Later. After my cup of morning joe settles in.
It usually takes me 2!
Another one! You are on fire… but then I read the comment about doing them ahead. Still impressive and a real work out for the grey matter…
yep – I need to do 3 more in order to get a full week’s worth 😀
A crow? I’m not so sure about that. You need a rhyme for pigeon. (K)
*giggle*
smidgen?
ok, Kerfe – here you go:
You honor me David.
It takes 2 to tango 💃🕺
At least two.
Love this! 👏
💝 Lucy 💝
Ok here’s my first attempt:
I went to buy some cooking fat
And tripped over the flipping cat 😹
The family friendly version doesn’t quite work…
That’s awesome! 😀
BTW, I’m writing these because I want to get ahead in my #APoemADay game… so I wrote 7 gogyohkas for this week, now working on 7 schuttelreims for the following week… and then,… not sure yet.
Wow, you are really schutteling ahead 🤩
Is that like cleaning your teeth five times a day for a week and then not cleaning them for 4 weeks? 😉
*laughing*
BTW, “fooking” seems tame enough to me 😉
I wasn’t sure 😅
Yum yum, though they never seem to sleep here, is that the same as eating crow? – No, not half as tasty
🍴 Crow. It’s what’s for dinner. 🍴
‘Eating Crow’ be humiliated by having to admit one’s defeats or mistakes.
“the so-called experts will be eating crow tonight
👍 Andrew 👍
🖕👨🏫