Hot, or: Heavy

My 1st ukiah

(reverse haiku inspired by inverted photo)

feather-like white palm fronds soft
sway high in hot waft
in fiery sky held aloft

18 thoughts on “Hot, or: Heavy”

  1. I like your verse above- especially with the photo; as I see it, it is a valid haiku; in any case ‘reversing haiku’ could at best only be based on a surface ‘understanding’ of the technique, at worst exorcising love for life, imho

    1. I am def. not an authority on what is and what is not a haiku – I find the whole thing very confusing, but I am okay at following forms that other people have created… so if somebody created this and called the “shoobie doobie doo”, I would call it that – I don’t really care πŸ˜€

      ❀
      David

    1. Yeah, I found other people who had written reverse haikus, but the ukiah is actually even more reversed because it’s required to rhyme (which I like), and the idea of basing it on an inverted photo somehow just felt natural to me personally πŸ˜€

      Thanks, Dave!

      ❀
      David

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