A ukiah
(reverse haiku inspired by inverted photo)
sorrowed, Mars regolith shed
alone, blue in bed
Venus, with Vulcan, had fled
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of a son
I adore the concept and the iciness of the poetry is utterly glowing. Phenomenal!
❤ Thanks so much, Masa ❤
-David
The rhythm feels like morse code to me. A message from the cosmos. (K)
Maybe they 👽 beamed it into my 🧠
Entirely possible.
Awesomeness, dear David. Love it. ❤️❤️
💞 Jeff 💞
I have not seen haiku/ukiah before. The 7-5-7 instead of the 5-7-5 pattern intrigues me. I can hardly wait to try it!
technically, it’s also supposed to rhyme 🙂
so there are two requirements!
❤
David
Oh, I didn’t realize that. Wow! That adds a dimension of difficulty I was not prepared to address!
Another shattering ukiah! So upset he tossed his clothes away and shivering cold watched as the over heated lovers streaked away…. Vulcan tries to paint himself as the victim but the truth is out!
🥶 Thanks, Muri 🥶
Much love,
David
Venus was never to be trusted. Poor Mars. Good one, David. 🙂
🤎 Terveen, thank you! 🤎
At
https://thehobartchinaman.wordpress.com/2021/07/13/is-reverse-haiku-ukiah-or-ihakui/
we address the haiku/ukiah debate and suggest an alternative, the ihakuia
cheerio!
David, your link was wrong so I fixed it in your comment. Thank you for sharing this with me 😀
❤
David
thanks very much