Comma or Colon

I don't mince words but 
I want to crble them up and spla tte  
       S            um                                                 r
            pl                          S                  pl
    tt        er                            atte
a                        Splat                          r
          s                          te    r                        spl
                pla                                      a  t
           tte    r                                              t   
Them across [CANVAS]                e
With    a    b--r--o--a--d                                   r
     paint
    BRUSH
    br u sh
   b r u s h
  b r uu s h
 bb r u s hh

I would sssmmmeeeaaaarrrrrrrrrrrrrrr
                             them together -
           Are brleude really purple?
           Are yerleldow together the same as orange?
           Do ybellluoew actually make green?

I really doubt it                    
because                    
our-


         <e (Y) e>          <e (Y) e>
                               c
                                a
                             n ' t
                    q  u  i  t  e
s e e               
     t h e 
              t r u t h

d’Verse Open Link Night

For this most recent OLN at d’Verse, I’d like to share a poem that I wrote last August, nearly one year ago.

This is one of many pieces that I have written in an exploration of what is and what is not poetry. TBH with you, this question still leaves me confused; but, regardless, I really enjoyed creating this one!

61 thoughts on “Comma or Colon”

  1. The fun and sense of exploration come through, David.
    I think if you consider something poetry, then it is, even if others argue. As with all creative arts, there will always be some who like it, and others who don’t.

  2. How I love this! So creative.

    Yes, what is and is not poetry? I find that I care less and less every day about answering this question πŸ˜‰ . This is why I call myself an “anti-poet” rather than a poet, because I’m really not that interested in being a “proper’ poet at all. I prefer Art ( which comes with it’s own annoying question as to what qualifies as such…so I’ll rename that to “creative expression”). Creativity is the most important thing for me. (Which is what appeals to me about this piece you’ve posted!)

  3. kaykuala

    “I really enjoyed creating this one!”

    Yes, David, you can say that again! Hank enjoyed the fun too! It tests the mind in trying to unravel the mix, but that is where the challenge is!

    Hank

  4. I think this is poetry. It has a fun and silly outlook, and it has some deep truth in the final stanza. I love this, you always find new ways to breathe life into writing and poetry pieces; and honestly, I find it really cool you do that. Sometimes, things, patterns, forms–they can get repetitive. It’s nice you can keep us on our toes, David, we’ll never know what to expect next!

    “This is one of many pieces that I have written in an exploration of what is and what is not poetry. TBH with you, this question still leaves me confused; but, regardless, I really enjoyed creating this one!”

    With your last thought here, and I mean no disrespect to anyone that does actually like her work, but Gabbie Hanna is what comes to mind with what is NOT poetry. She already has her own circle of drama in the YouTube community, but her poetry pieces, imo, are an exploration of what is not poetry. I won’t get into too much about it, you can be the judge of that. πŸ˜‰

    But, David, THIS is a poem. Not everything has to have a concrete meaning, sometimes it can just be for what it is. πŸ™‚ Excellent work here, I always enjoy reading you.

    1. Lucy, I had never heard of Gabbie Hanna before, but I’ll check her out to see what you mean. I actually really appreciate you sharing an example of “not poetry” with me because I’m really struggling (in a good way) to wrap my mind around this.

      ❀ Lucy ❀

      Thank you,
      David

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