A ‘Waltz wave’
Dedicated to Murisopsis
Break~
ing eve~
ry
word in~
to syl~la~
bles forc~
es
one's read~
ers to de~
cel~er~ate be~
cause, oth~er~
wise, mean~
ing~
ful nu~
anc~es go
en~tire~
ly
un~no~
ticed.
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Made me smile. Yes, they do go unnoticed. You emphasized that well. 🙂
💖 Terveen 💖
Hehe! I’m so glad that my OCD has inspired you to really put the Waltz wave to the test. I did have to s l o w d o w n to read this one – well done!!
I’m so glad you made me think about this, Muri – it was super interesting to give it a go 🙂
Brilliant!! 👏👏👏
Thanks, Diana!
❤
David
meaningful but tricky to read but then again good for me to practice slowing down.💖💖
me too 😉
After all, I was the one who had to figure out where every syllable ended!
🤣🤣🤣
It’s amazing how much time we “waste” , it takes” to learn or how much fun we have”
I think it’s some of both. ❤️
As you know I like to do those between line breaks occasionally, but this is taking it to new heights. It does force the reader to pay attention. I’ll put it on my list of forms to try. (K)
I was just experimenting… it’s not a device that I tend to use, as you know… but maybe I’ll use it more in the future, having played with it a bit here 🙂
Much love,
David
I’m going to try this form for Colleen this week–it’s poet’s choice.
Who is Colleen & what kind of prompt does she offer?
❤
David
#TankaTuesday
https://wordcraftpoetry.com/category/tanka-tuesday-poetry-challenges/
how many prompts do you participate in on a weekly basis? I can barely keep up with d’Verse
I don’t do every dVerse–sometimes none per week in fact, but I like to do at least one. I do Colleen about half the time. I used to do Sue Vincent’s photo prompt most weeks–I do miss her photos as inspiration for my watercolors. I do the Kick-About which is every two weeks. And earthweal and Thursday Doors and various other prompts on and off. And often I combine them. It all depends on time, and what appeals to me. But I’m about to take a break from the internet altogether for a few weeks–I do that every once in awhile too.
will you give us warning?
Well, as of now I’m planning to do draw a bird day on Sunday and then take a break.
I hope you get the rest that you need!
Me too. There are other things I need to focus on also.
I definitely decelerated when reading this, but I grasped the meaning eventually (my poor eyeballs, though) 😀 I love the accentuation on the meter and syllables, and if I were to take this deeper, I’d say it gives us an outlook to slow down when reading to truly grasp the content. There’s all the time in the world. Very funny and well written, David! Like I said, it’s always something new with you and that’s what makes your work extra, extra enjoyable to read.
❤ 🙂 Lucy ❤ 🙂 ~ thanks so much!
Sincerely,
David
Very clever, David. This reminded me of teaching iambic pentameter to HS seniors who struggled with syllables. Our first of many hurdles when learning this structure. 🤪
💞 Michele 💞
Very cleverly done, David, and cute as well.
Love,
D
❤ Спасибо, Долли ❤
The pleasure is mine, David.
😻
Nicely done David, very intricate and cleverly broken down! 😁👏 Really makes a person slow down and read it carefully; slowly read it!
Thanks so much, Ken!
❤
David
You’re most welcome sir! 🙏😊😁
I go, again, with Jandl, Ernst on this:
manche meinen,
dass man lechts und rinks
nicht velwechsern kann
werch ein Illtum
what are rinks?
manche meinen, says Jandl, dass man rechts und links nicht verwecheln kann, Welch ein Irrtum 😀
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not directly related to your cutting syllables – only by way of one non-sense replying with another. 🙂
silliness! 🤪
exactly 😀
Haha..
🙃 Anita 🙂
Nice writing David!! It really does make one decelerate 😄 Why is this dedicated to Murisopsis?
She wrote to me that she didn’t like this form of poetry because she doesn’t like being forced to break words into syllables across lines… so that made me wonder what it would look like if I took that to an extreme 😀
❤
David