A ‘Waltz wave’
Chop-
py wat-
ers;
only
calm below
the sur-
face;
broken
planks drifting
high above sink-
ing, bluish
bodies;
can-
dela-
bra, wine bot-
tles rest
on
ocean
floor.
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I think it’s harder to write than it appears. You are doing a good job with it. Amazing photo too. (K)
thanks 🙂
I completed this series of 7 just today… now gotta decide which from is next.
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David
looking forward to it!
Nice one David. Remember swimming under the water and thinking how wonderful, peaceful and quiet it was? Lovely poem. ❤️❤️
I used to go scuba diving with my Dad – being under the water is completely different than floating on the surface!
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David
Yes it really is David. I found it incredibly peaceful. ❤️🤗😘💕🦋
I am admiring the way you have broken the words… kudos! My question – which came first the photo or the poem??
The poem came first this time 🙂 – good question, Muri, I should have written that.
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David
Choppy waters and chopped up words. 😆 This structure does slow down the reading, which forces a deeper consideration of each word and more attention to the many sounds (and meanings) that can be found in one word. Interesting.
you got it, Michele – that’s what I’m experimenting with here 😀
thank you so much!
-David
David, the mad-scientist poet man! Dissecting words. 👨🏼🔬
more mad than scientist, unfortunately! ❤
On the ocean floor is where the party’s at.
yup 🦈🦀
Love the rhythm
Thanks 🙂
Yeah, it’s an interesting form… I do feel that its restrictions affect the way it’s experienced by the readers…
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David