My 1st atom poem
verse
drafted
brief
poets
limited
are we
words
ought be
lusty
sweat
on their
brows
Atom
- Three line stanzas=tercets;
- Count letters: 5-7-5;
- This form links tercets under title;
- No punctuation or capitalization.
verse
drafted
brief
poets
limited
are we
words
ought be
lusty
sweat
on their
brows
Well done, David.
Love,
D
💓 Dolly 💓
“words ought to be lusty…sweat on their brows” Wonderful metaphor, David! You certainly put words to work in this poem! Bravo! Have a great day! 🙂
Cheryl, thank you!
much love,
David
This is a masterpiece, David. Bravo! 🙂
💖 thanks, Terveen 💖
Lovely! I find that the shorter forms can be more of a challenge to distill and convey thoughts in such limited words. You don’t seem to have any problems!
💚 Muri 💚
(you only see the final results… you don’t know how much trouble I have before publishing them!)
“Sweat on their brows” – love it! Working hard at the writing ✍ craft 💪
yeah – they’re doin’ their best to pull their weights! 😉
Who doesn’t love lusty words?
🙃 they’re my favorite kind, Colin 🙃
-David
😀
Ha! Always making us smile, David. Love it. ❤️❤️
😃 Jeff 😃
fades
into its
shade
forms
empty in
style
poets
will do it
today
Beautiful, Alice❣️
-David
xoxo thank you. Yours impressed me and inspired.
❤ thank you so much ❤
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❤ Paula ❤
never
seen one
great
atoms
write my
verse
thank
you for a
taste
today,
I learn’d
o’ them.