Sturdy, or: Spanking

verse
drafted
brief

poets
limited
are we

words
ought be
lusty

sweat
on their
brows

23 thoughts on “Sturdy, or: Spanking”

1. Well done, David.
   Love,
   D

   1. 💓 Dolly 💓

2. “words ought to be lusty…sweat on their brows” Wonderful metaphor, David! You certainly put words to work in this poem! Bravo! Have a great day! 🙂

   1. Cheryl, thank you!

      much love,
      David

3. This is a masterpiece, David. Bravo! 🙂

   1. 💖 thanks, Terveen 💖

4. Lovely! I find that the shorter forms can be more of a challenge to distill and convey thoughts in such limited words. You don’t seem to have any problems!

   1. 💚 Muri 💚
      
      (you only see the final results… you don’t know how much trouble I have before publishing them!)

5. “Sweat on their brows” – love it! Working hard at the writing ✍ craft 💪

   1. yeah – they’re doin’ their best to pull their weights! 😉

6. Who doesn’t love lusty words?

   1. 🙃 they’re my favorite kind, Colin 🙃

      -David

      1. 😀

7. Ha! Always making us smile, David. Love it. ❤️❤️

   1. 😃 Jeff 😃

8. fades
   into its
   shade

   forms
   empty in
   style

   poets
   will do it
   today

   1. Beautiful, Alice❣️

      -David

      1. xoxo thank you. Yours impressed me and inspired.

         1. ❤ thank you so much ❤

9. […] is my first experience in writing atom poetry, which I found at The Skeptic’s Kaddish. It’s harder than it seems to write 5/7/5 in letters (not syllables) and end up with […]

   1. ❤ Paula ❤

10. never
    seen one
    great

    atoms
    write my
    verse

    thank
    you for a
    taste

    1. today,
       I learn’d
       o’ them.

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