My 1st atom poem
verse
drafted
brief
poets
limited
are we
words
ought be
lusty
sweat
on their
brows
Atom
- Three line stanzas=tercets;
- Count letters: 5-7-5;
- This form links tercets under title;
- No punctuation or capitalization.
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The Skeptic's Kaddish ๐ฎ๐ฑ 
Well done, David.
Love,
D
๐ Dolly ๐
“words ought to be lusty…sweat on their brows” Wonderful metaphor, David! You certainly put words to work in this poem! Bravo! Have a great day! ๐
Cheryl, thank you!
much love,
David
This is a masterpiece, David. Bravo! ๐
๐ thanks, Terveen ๐
Lovely! I find that the shorter forms can be more of a challenge to distill and convey thoughts in such limited words. You don’t seem to have any problems!
๐ Muri ๐
(you only see the final results… you don’t know how much trouble I have before publishing them!)
“Sweat on their brows” – love it! Working hard at the writing โ craft ๐ช
yeah – they’re doin’ their best to pull their weights! ๐
Who doesn’t love lusty words?
๐ they’re my favorite kind, Colin ๐
-David
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Ha! Always making us smile, David. Love it. โค๏ธโค๏ธ
๐ Jeff ๐
fades
into its
shade
forms
empty in
style
poets
will do it
today
Beautiful, Aliceโฃ๏ธ
-David
xoxo thank you. Yours impressed me and inspired.
โค thank you so much โค
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โค Paula โค
never
seen one
great
atoms
write my
verse
thank
you for a
taste
today,
I learn’d
o’ them.