An atom poem
heart pumping blood I feel it pulse in you you’re flushed coral oh yes dearest my pet I know what you crave sweet talk and licks I love teasing you so you’re so so wet there that’s a savory taste it’s my piquant treat
- Three line stanzas=tercets;
- Count letters: 5-7-5;
- This form links tercets under title;
- No punctuation or capitalization.
d’Verse: A quadrille
The above atom poem is my take on d’Verse’s Quadrille challenge #134.
The quadrille is simply a poem of 44 words (excluding the title), and it can take any form. This week’s challenge was to use the word “heart” in a quadrille.
76 thoughts on “Sweet, or: Savory”
Very impressive, even more so with your additional restrictions! Very visceral, with the highly reduced stanzas leading to a sort of natural start-stop of a beating heart. Splendid work.
💝 thanks so much, Masa 💝
This is very interesting David. Hank frequently sees a haiku of a 5-7-5 syllable count. You brought it to a higher level with a 5-7-5 letters combination. Very innovative!
❤ Hank ❤
Thanks so much, but I can't take credit for this form of poetry – somebody else developed it… I just adopted his/her idea 🙂
Love a sexy, NSFW piece. That’s quite a way to start the morning!
🍑 thanks! 🍑
🧡 Worms, thank you 🧡
This was steamy and hot…
😍 Thanks so much, Björn 😍
Atom? Or atomic. 🔥
️🔥 Dora, thank you so much! ️🔥
Definitely a savory read! I may just read it twice! 🔥
😋 Tricia 😋 – I hope your found the flavor to your liking!
So sensual and luscious David!
💘 Linda 💘 – thank you!