My 1st Alouette
Writing on and on,
Calling for black swan,
Which shall soar forth from down(ed) soul,
Bearing long-lost words.
That rarest of birds...
Without which, I can't be whole.
I'm... sure it is true...
Should I continue,
Free, winged truth shall arise.
Oh, desperately,
I will this to be,
Ere rising into the skies.
The Alouette
This form was created by Jan Turner. Following are the rules:
- Consists of two or more stanzas of 6 lines each (12 lines or more);
- With the following set rules:
- Syllabic: 5/5/7/5/5/7
- Rhyme Scheme: aabccb
Fantastic!I think I’ll try this poetic form out today :D. And here’s my first set of senryus:
https://theforgersoffantasy.art.blog/2021/09/27/music-a-set-of-senryus/
how lovely โค
Thanks! ๐
I love this one!!
Yeah? That makes me happy, Lia – thank you!
โค
David
I am delighted by the poem and the form! Sort of happy that I’m late to the party so that I saw the revision – nicely done!
Yeah ๐, my poems get better with age!
The rhymes seem very natural here. I’ve been having trouble with them. (K)
๐โบ๏ธ๐ Kerfe ๐โบ๏ธ๐
“That rarest of birds…
Without which, I can’t be whole”
and these one too. i really liked this aloutte
โค Kunjal โค
“Calling for black swan,
Which shall soar forth from down soul,”
these lines are so cool!
thanks, Kunjal!
Actually – I just changed ‘down’ to ‘down(ed)’ to give it a double meaning ๐
โค
David
OH yes i just Saw it!
Beautiful David! ๐ ๐ You poem made me fly away ans it was divine. ๐ฆ
๐ Filipa, thank you ๐
I’ve written too fast and I made two mistakes… ๐คฆโโ๏ธ I guess I was still flying.
well… at least you didn’t write two fast and make too mistakes! that would have been horrible ๐
๐๐คฃ๐คฃ
lovely. A natural born poet you are, my friend. Thanks for sharing.
๐ Selma ๐ – you’re very kind.
โค
David