My 1st Cadralor
In the form of 5 Kimos
countless Russian and English children's books;
last week's newspaper; a child's
fairy robe on the couch
nearly to the ceiling, six shelves, volumes
of Jewish texts; mementos;
tchotchkes; toys; games; clutter
including chairs, one-third of the room for
the wooden table, strewn with
laptop; wires; watch; hot mug
three framed jigsaw puzzles; horizontal
bookshelf; a light switch; framed text
from Proverbs on the walls
the overweight, bearded poet in green
pajamas surveys the mess;
hesitates to publish
d’Verse
Thursday’s d’Verse prompt was to try our hands at writing cadralors.
Cadralor
The cadralor is a poem of 5, unrelated, numbered stanzaic images, each of which can stand alone as a poem, is fewer than 10 lines, and ideally constrains all stanzas to the same number of lines. Imagery is crucial to cadralor: each stanza should be a whole, imagist poem, almost like a scene from a film, or a photograph. The fifth stanza acts as the crucible, alchemically pulling the unrelated stanzas together…
Kimo
The kimo shares much in common with the haiku: it appears in three lines, making it a tristich, with each line following a diminishing pattern:
- Ten syllables
- Seven syllables
- Six syllables
Each of these lines are unrhymed.
The kimo often deals with a static image, a single moment in which there is no movement. Along with its brief nature, this makes it an excellent form to reflect on or celebrate a particular instance.
Great ending to this layered poem. Thanks for the info on a Kimo.
๐๐ Sara ๐๐
Green pyjamas!
I have other colors (like pink and navy blue) too – it just happened to be the green ones that night ๐
Its nice you mix it up a bit! ๐
This was so real and I could imagine myself in the room. I loved the fairy robe on the couch! Well done David โบ๏ธ๐
๐งก Christine ๐งก – thank you!
I can really see the poet sitting there writing what he sees in his room… love it.
๐ Bjรถrn ๐
I really like the way this poem uses not one but two forms and makes them disappear under its message and medium. That’s difficult to do, and I take my hat off to you. I also loved the warmth and life and sense of past building present that these brief phrases display in such abundance. A pure pleasure to read.
๐ thanks, Joy ๐
Oh I laughed outloud at the last line! I /knew/ there was a reason I didn’t publish! Bravo.
๐ Alexandra ๐ – thank you so much!
-David
This is deeply deeply poignant! I could feel the hesitation in the fifth stanza .. you describe the conflict which every writer goes through so well here. Hit publish, you are the best ๐๐
๐ค Sanaa ๐ค – thank you for the encouragement!
Yours,
David
“Get out of my psychosis” came to mind, as if you were describing my surroundings and delay. What a wonderfully descriptive and present poem.
๐ Paul ๐ – thank you. I really was trying to be as descriptive as I could be within the parameters of the kimos…
Yours,
David
Quite possibly the perfect setting for writing a cadralor, David! Some muses are messy ๐
๐ Lynn ๐ – thank you so much!
You’re welcome, David ๐
Well done, my friend!!
โค Helen โค – thank you!
Yours,
David
Wow, two forms combined! I think your abode has it all, and then some! ๐
What it definitely has, Tricia, is too many children’s books, games, and toysโผ๏ธ
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David
Haha. It actually looks cozy and lovely. A warm home. ๐
Warm and messy! ๐ฃ