Balagan, or: *Sigh*

My 1st Cadralor

In the form of 5 Kimos

countless Russian and English children's books;
last week's newspaper; a child's
fairy robe on the couch

nearly to the ceiling, six shelves, volumes
of Jewish texts; mementos;
tchotchkes; toys; games; clutter

including chairs, one-third of the room for 
the wooden table, strewn with 
laptop; wires; watch; hot mug

three framed jigsaw puzzles; horizontal
bookshelf; a light switch; framed text 
from Proverbs on the walls

the overweight, bearded poet in green
pajamas surveys the mess;
hesitates to publish

d’Verse

Thursday’s d’Verse prompt was to try our hands at writing cadralors.


Cadralor

The cadralor is a poem of 5, unrelated, numbered stanzaic images, each of which can stand alone as a poem, is fewer than 10 lines, and ideally constrains all stanzas to the same number of lines. Imagery is crucial to cadralor: each stanza should be a whole, imagist poem, almost like a scene from a film, or a photograph. The fifth stanza acts as the crucible, alchemically pulling the unrelated stanzas together…


Kimo

The kimo shares much in common with the haiku: it appears in three lines, making it a tristich, with each line following a diminishing pattern:

  1. Ten syllables
  2. Seven syllables
  3. Six syllables

Each of these lines are unrhymed.

The kimo often deals with a static image, a single moment in which there is no movement. Along with its brief nature, this makes it an excellent form to reflect on or celebrate a particular instance.

55 thoughts on “Balagan, or: *Sigh*”

    1. I only photographed part of the room and didn’t describe all the other stuff lying on the floor, table, etc… both for lack of syllables in my kimos and also out of a sense of shame ๐Ÿ˜‰

  1. Ah! This is a new to me form (and quite new I see). I’m intrigued but don’t see how it all gets pulled together in the 5th stanza… I read the examples on the website and the waters remain muddied. Your poem however was (in my opinion) more lucid and visually accessible. You should submit it to Gleam!

  2. So fun to have a peek inside each others’ lives. I must admit my living room/dining room/kitchen is in a similar state right now. Too many projects going on at once. Busy lives are good..

  3. Hi David๐Ÿ˜‚ Why so messy? I think this is how some of us are. That is why we appreciate a clean space because it’s the quiet before the storm.

  4. Looks like a place to run away from or tidy up or write about, smiles. Thanks for incorporating another poetry form into the mix. You did capture the static moments in each stanza.

      1. It was because each stanza was a Poem. It seems like stop and go. Though I did have a vision of the old Jewish Poet and each diorama being a sepia painting.

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