Push, or: Shove

A Cadralor

In the form of 5 Kimos

sweat beading up on my forehead; glasses
slipping; cotton undershirt
drenched through, sticking tightly

flat feet shifting just slightly, shin muscles
shooting sharply, absorbing
jarring jolts, careening

heavy laptop and accompanying
charger, mouse, keyboard in my
backpack, bumping others

air conditioning is requested by
an old lady; she's unheard 
over the rough jostling

pushing, I reach through slick, sardined bodies
to hit 'stop', as the bus swerves,
lurching towards my street


The cadralor is a poem of 5, unrelated, numbered stanzaic images, each of which can stand alone as a poem, is fewer than 10 lines, and ideally constrains all stanzas to the same number of lines. Imagery is crucial to cadralor: each stanza should be a whole, imagist poem, almost like a scene from a film, or a photograph. The fifth stanza acts as the crucible, alchemically pulling the unrelated stanzas together…


The kimo shares much in common with the haiku: it appears in three lines, making it a tristich, with each line following a diminishing pattern:

  1. Ten syllables
  2. Seven syllables
  3. Six syllables

Each of these lines are unrhymed.

The kimo often deals with a static image, a single moment in which there is no movement. Along with its brief nature, this makes it an excellent form to reflect on or celebrate a particular instance.

d’Verse poetics prompt:

‘Concrete or Abstract?’

Today at d’Verse, poets were prompted to write a poem using only concrete nouns, subject matter and imagery. For the purposes of this exercise, the following words are banned: soul, love, lust, dreams, sorrow, suffering, heartache, wonder, etc. 

Poet are to avoid writing directly of the emotions that concrete objects invoke. It should be left to readers to experience the emotions, without the poet referring to them directly.

Let’s write poetry together!

When it comes to partnership, some humans can make their lives alone – it’s possible. But creatively, it’s more like painting: you can’t just use the same colours in every painting. It’s just not an option. You can’t take the same photograph every time and live with art forms with no differences.

Ben Harper (b. 1969)

Would you like to create poetry with me and have a completed poem of yours featured here at the Skeptic’s Kaddish? I am very excited to have launched the ‘Poetry Partners’ initiative and am looking forward to meeting and creating with you… Check it out!

85 thoughts on “Push, or: Shove”

  1. Thank you, David, for the clear and detailed explanations of Kimo, cadralor, and concrete poem. This is a form that appeals to me.

    That is one bus I would not like to be on! Your poem pairs perfectly with the photo!. I can almost smell the sweat and hear the overloaded bus squealing and groaning under its heavy load! โค

  2. So now i have learned about the kimo. Bravo and thank you for sharing

    Happy Tuesday


  3. I appreciate your knowledge of poetry and the various kinds. I, myself, just write what flows from my heart. I would be enhanced by learning the things that you know!
    Thank you brother!

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