Joules, or: Abundance

A waltmarie

Comprised of 5 consecutive American sentences

Cotton candy cumulus clouds float across the sky, veiling
the sun.
Picnicking families light charcoal afire; young'uns watch it
A barefoot three-legged race begins. Runners push off against
the earth.
Boys and girls on the merry-go-round squeal and giggle as it's
More hearty food is heaped upon white paper plates than they can

The waltmarie

Created as a nonce by Candace Kubinec.

  • 10 lines
  • Even lines are two syllables in length, odd lines are longer (but no specific syllable count)
  • Even lines make their own mini-poem if read separately

No other rules for subject or rhymes.

The American sentence

Allen Ginsberg, inventor of the American Sentence, felt that the haiku didnโ€™t work as well in English. Ginsberg decided to remove the line structure of the haiku, maintaining the requirement of 17 syllables total. He felt that removing the line count freed the American Sentence up for the idiosyncrasies of English phonemes.

The requirements:

  1. Composed in one line;
  2. Syllabic, 17 syllables;
  3. Condensed, written with no unnecessary words or articles;
  4. Complete sentence or sentences;
  5. Includes a turn or enlightenment.

d’Verse poetics prompt:

‘Concrete or Abstract?’

At d’Verse, poets were prompted to write a poem using only concrete nouns, subject matter and imagery. For the purposes of this exercise, the following words are banned: soul, love, lust, dreams, sorrow, suffering, heartache, wonder, etc. 

Poet are to avoid writing directly of the emotions that concrete objects invoke. It should be left to readers to experience the emotions, without the poet referring to them directly.

Let’s write poetry together!

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Ben Harper (b. 1969)

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38 thoughts on “Joules, or: Abundance”

  1. A delightful poem! The second poem (within the poem) is darker and feels almost ominous. Impressive combining the 2 forms and managing a prompt too!

  2. Ahh another waltmarie ๐Ÿ˜‹ the thought of cotton candy makes my mouth water… but here we don’t have Halloween celebrations, we have something else to supply us with sweets ๐Ÿ˜Š
    And btw, here’s my first cadralor-haiku (Idk if it can be called a cadralor, you tell!)

    Halloween horrors

    1. Cotton candy isn’t for Halloween – because it takes up too much space! The kids want small candies that can fit in their bags ๐Ÿ™‚

      Are you going to try the d’Verse prompts this week? There have been two so far:


      Since you seem very interested in networking with other poets and sharing your poems, you really should give d’Verse a try!


      1. Ohh nice!I couldn’t try DVerse last time because you said the prompts open at 10:00 in Israel,which is about 1:30 in the night in India. So I’d be fast asleep,no?I’ll try it now,as I have a cadralor for that ๐Ÿ˜€

        1. the prompts are open for several days – not only when they’re posted… you can respond to them the day after! Enjoy! ๐Ÿ˜€


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