Writing, or: The wall

My 1st Minute Poem

I wish I could express my thoughts,
Twisted in knots,
Too tightly wound,
Can't find the sounds.

Even words written defy me,
Hiding shyly
From angsty dreams,
From muffled screams

Even when lines and verses flow
I always know
they all fall short -
my truth distort

Minute Poetry

The Minute Poem is rhyming verse form consisting of 12 lines of 60 syllables written in strict iambic meter. The poem is formatted into 3 stanzas of 8,4,4,4; 8,4,4,4; 8,4,4,4 syllables. The rhyme scheme is as follows: aabb, ccdd, eeff

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When it comes to partnership, some humans can make their lives alone – it’s possible. But creatively, it’s more like painting: you can’t just use the same colours in every painting. It’s just not an option. You can’t take the same photograph every time and live with art forms with no differences.

Ben Harper (b. 1969)

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48 thoughts on “Writing, or: The wall”

  1. Another interesting form, poet teacher. ๐Ÿ‘จ๐Ÿปโ€๐Ÿซ For being your first, it is so well-versed. ๐Ÿ‘๐Ÿป

  2. “Even when lines and verses flow
    I always know
    they all fall short –
    my truth distort”

    Ah, the bane of any writer who has ever wielded quill or keyboard (or pencil, for that matter). This was a fun one to read, David. I get a kick out of seeing what you’re up to with various formats, as well as marveling at how effortless you make them appear. ๐Ÿ™‚

    1. โค Lauren โค – you're very kind, but honestly, these forms are just like word games or word puzzles – ya know? With a thesaurus and other reference books (which are all online these days), it's just a matter of sitting down and having some fun ๐Ÿ™‚ (although I suppose it depends upon one’s concept of ‘fun’!)

  3. And even then
    Considering all the knots
    Following a complicated rhyme scheme
    (For me, yes me)
    You expressed so clearly your truth and I hear all the sounds

      1. You most welcome David
        Enjoy the rest of your Saturday evening.
        We have our scheduled power outage for the next 2hours.

        PS: SP is kinda funny ๐Ÿ˜„ don’t you think?
        I just read the comment …โ˜บ

        1. scheduled power outages sound like fun…. Not!

          P.S. I agree.

          P.P.S. He also seems very friendly – like you ๐Ÿ™‚

          P.P.P.S. Not that it’s a friendliness competition, mind you!

          1. No it’s not fun for many, especially if they never prepared themselves according to their outage schedule.
            That’s when most people flip.

            Otherwise i make it fun for me. Also because i can lol.

            Lol, @friendliness competition

            But neither is it an unfriendly competition.
            As for me i like reading funny and witty comments ๐Ÿคฃ

  4. Oh, hang the scheme, syllable count and other (what I deem) contrivances! Loved your words, the thought and the tempo my mind put to this little one. Obviously I’m not a poet, but I love it when one of you techno-poemicists steps off into the deep and really gets it all together – limerick, haiku, oblomongus, crossword, or ode. Excuse, but of necessity, I must carefully avoid trying to emulate the works of professionals; I’ll stay simple.

    1. Thanks, SP ๐Ÿ™‚

      Oh, hang the scheme, syllable count and other (what I deem) contrivances!

      What do you mean by this? I don’t understand – do you relate to all poetic devices as contrivances?


      1. Not at all. Only to me. Some are difficult for me to understand “why this form, as opposed to another?” I recognize the work and skills necessary for each. Some of these forms get in the way of my understanding meaning and thought. My fault for not seeing the beauty in form. I ain’t got the chops to try most of these (different) forms. Know that for a fact. Call me “simple.”

        1. why this form, as opposed to another?

          I think about that too, actually! That’s one of the reasons why I keep on playing with various forms… to help me figure out how they can help me convey my thoughts.


  5. It can be frustrating when you can’t get the words right–or can’t find a word for what you feel.
    Your second stanza reminded me that I’ve dreamed poems, though I usually can’t remember them when I wake up. Apparently most people can’t read or really use language in their dreams. Those that do, are usually poets.

  6. Brilliant David, I can very much relate to the sentiments expressed here! ๐Ÿ‘๐Ÿ‘โค๏ธ There’s some thoughts and struggles that we writers still find difficult to express on paper.

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