Fast, or: Furious

Posted on by ben Alexander

Poetry Partners #16

A blitz poem by Kunjal of ‘Duo Disseminators’

Come now.
Come quick.
Quick child.
Quick to pick.
Pick your will.
Pick cheap.
Cheap racket.
Cheap thrill
Thrill ride.
Thrills in count.
Count anything.
Count everything.
Everything is much.
Everything busts.
Bust sale.
Bust on picks.
Pick there.
Pick and steal!
Steal from her.
Steal- arms hurt.
Hurt is painful.
Hurt my eyes.
Eyes are stable.
Eye next aisle
Aisles crowded
Aisles offer much.
Much rendered.
Much to embroil
Embroil to forget?
Embroil a bite
Bite in food.
Bite to fight.
Fight another day!
Fight the lady beside!
Lady at the bar.
Lady like.
Like to hate.
Liking not…
Not much.
Not fine.
Fine by me.
Fine choice.
Choice it is.
Choice befuddle.
Befuddle the world.
Befuddled by costs.
Costs your thumb.
Costs a poem!

A pantoum by ben Alexander of ‘The Skeptic’s Kaddish’

Thumbing noses at everything
The cost of fools' hate comes unfurled
Pain; hurt; and fight is all scorns bring
Choices befuddling to kind world

The cost of fools' hate comes unfurled
Cheap bars and rackets crowd their days
Choices befuddling to kind world
They steal; they bust; render malaise

Cheap bars and rackets crowd their days
When food's offered, bite hands that bring
They steal; they bust; render malaise
~ Costs of not loving anything

When food's offered, bite hands that bring
Embroiled with ladies they can't keep
~ Costs of not loving anything
Goons eye the quick, picking thrills cheap

Embroiled with ladies they can't keep
Thumbing noses at everything
Goons eye the quick, picking thrills cheap
Pain; hurt; and fight is all scorns bring

Let’s write poetry together!

When it comes to partnership, some humans can make their lives alone – it’s possible. But creatively, it’s more like painting: you can’t just use the same colours in every painting. It’s just not an option. You can’t take the same photograph every time and live with art forms with no differences.

–Ben Harper (b. 1969)

Would you like to create poetry with me and have a completed poem of yours featured here at the Skeptic’s Kaddish? I am very excited to have launched the ‘Poetry Partners’ initiative and am looking forward to meeting and creating with you… Check it out!

List of Poetry Partners

24 thoughts on “Fast, or: Furious”

  4. Wow! Now I understand your invitation to others and challenge for yourself! So neat! This pair of works is awesome! I keep learning and getting quite stunned. I am also gushy….

    1. 🤍 Cindy 🤍 – yep! I tried to be clear in my explanation, but it’s much easier to understand when you’ve seen a couple of these ‘poetry partners’ collaborations.

      -David

      1. Your explanation is fine! I saw it just the other day. Yes, seeing another example helps crystalize it. Have a great week writing!

  5. Oh what an instructive form, so gracious in its movement, assisting the designer of verse to remain focused, starting where you left off to gather the poetic narrative, with guidance in the placing of words.

    Captivating storyline in pantoum, complimenting the rapids of the blitz verse, shining a light and teasing out the fast moving thoughts.

    The reader is enthralled.

  10. Yup. Leaving the poemetry to the professionals. But such a delight to read, even if at times for my ignorance, form defeats function.Thankee this morning (here) David.

      1. For me, David, I read the words to get the meaning, to get the message, to be inspired or challenged to think. Piddling with some of the “forms” I’ve been introduced to (thankee) I find the (my) words, the thoughts suffer, are sacrificed when I (of necessity lest I break a rule) focus on the rule. i can (usually) enjoy both rule and message when a professional crafts. My efforts? No so much. Thanks for teaching, informing, and good sir, for crafting.

  11. This is a really dynamic duo of styles. Several reads were required to catch everything that’s going on. Both pieces are intense and the repetition of lines/words adds a sort of surreal feel. Good job by both of you! 🙂

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