My 1st Tanaga
Modestly, she's apt to blush, Flowering ~anxiously~ lush. Her flow rushes over me; I'm drowning in her story.
My 2nd Tanaga
Stuffed myself into a box; Lost the keys to all the locks; Cut two holes out for my eyes So I could see through the lies.
The Tanaga is an indigenous type of Filipino poem, which consists of four lines (a quatrain), each with seven syllables, traditionally (but not always) following an AABB rhyme scheme.
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26 thoughts on “In her story, or: Through the lies”
Trust killed. It’s a horrible death. Loved the twist. 🙂
🤗 Terveen 🤗
If there’s one thing I hate, it’s a liar! I am not the suspicious type, but if I catch someone in a lie, I am usually done with them! I think the commonality that links these two poems together is deception. Very clever, David! 🙂
💙♥️ Cheryl ♥️💙
Those are both awesome, David. ❤️ I particularly enjoyed cutting holes to see through the lies.
🤍 Jeff 🤍 – thank you so much!
Most welcome, David. Always! 💛💛
Both poems have a richness. I especially like the second one – “Cut two holes out for my eyes/So I could see through the lies.” is inspired!
😊 Muri 😊
A new form of poetry that does so much with so few words. Great job David.
💖 Lauren, thanks 💖
Easy to judge, and harder to know – oneself. Good luck to you David.
💕 Lia 💕 – thank you
That second Tanaga is not playing games
I’m enthralled by the severity of the action and the revelations within that awkward and narrow place
– pure sight
💝 Abi 💝 ~ I have to say that I’m pleased with that one… Thank you!
And so you should be. That’s what great creatives do. Sagacious – photographers, musicians, writers and directors go to the most awkward and difficult places to meet their subject
Oh no..:( The 2nd Tanga made me feel so sad!! Needing such a hidey-hole is a sad state. I really enjoy your works.
💟 Cindy 💟 ~ I really appreciate it ~ thank you.
Finally, a new form of poetry which looks easy to try! And btw, I’ve sent the next one 🙂
I know, I know…! 😉
💘 Molly, thank you! 💘
🧸 Suzette 🧸