Poetry in partnership
My first taste of writing poetry in partnership with another poet has been the composition of a hyakuin (a renga comprised of 100 tankas) with Sangeetha of ‘Mindfills’, titled ‘Ripples’. This whetted my appetite for further creative collaborations, leading me to launch the ‘Poetry Partners’ initiative, which is an open invitation to all writers to publish their poems at the Skeptic’s Kaddish. Every submitted work gets posted, along with a personalized poem of mine inspired by the submitted work.
Quaranjavirus submitted a series of four haikus, and I published his series, extending each haiku into a tanka in an attempt to paint an image of the young poet himself writing the original verses. Not long thereafter, the two of us took to composing a renga together, the beginning of which you may read below.
We’ve decided to call this new collaboration ‘Many Waters’, inspired by Song of Songs (8:7) ~
|מַיִם רַבִּים, לֹא יוּכְלוּ לְכַבּוֹת אֶת-הָאַהֲבָה, וּנְהָרוֹת, לֹא יִשְׁטְפוּהָ…||Many waters cannot quench love, nor rivers drown it…|
Every tanka verse begins with a haiku of Quaranjavirus’, followed by two lines of mine. Thus far, we’ve completed twenty verses… and we’ll see how far this goes – maybe this collaboration will eventually become a hyakuin!
Many waters flowing
1 ~ 10
Monsoon arriving, Bringing tragedy and joy, Both sorrow and glee. [Streets flood into canal routes Mind floods with uncertainty] The rivers in spate, Swallowing all in their way, Showering their wrath. [Nāgas ascend to surface Soar into the air and dive] Swordfish ascending, Their hearts singing merrily, Relishing the storm. [Potamides saddle sturgeons Riding their rushing rivers] Boats carried away, Currents tossing them about, Lie battered by rain. [Truth undulates with algae Macroinvertebrates buzz] As do tranquil ponds, Buzzing with tranquil beings, Yet in immense spate. [Meditation in water Brings our heart rates down, calming] Feel the cold water, Attacking with cold fury, Yet calming your mind. [Sinking into frigid depths Letting go of mortal coil] Heart freed of harrow, Hugged genially by cold, Rinsed clean of troubles. [Cold water cycle spins tale Created out of whole cloth] Onlookers watch, shocked, At nature's wrath unleashed, The destruction wrought. [Sirens sing seductively Smiling smoothly at sailors] Hoping to tumble Into the land of mermaids, Or seas of treasure. [Davy Jones' Locker sparkles Beckoning to mortal men] Grindylows await, Their presence oblivious To ships steered by greed. [God of ~Elusive Sea Change~ Proteus foretells downfalls]
11 ~ 20
Thousands thus pursue The Weed of Eternal Life, Never to succeed. [Seekers dive through kelp forests In quest for enchanted roots] Only to perish, Consumed by dark energies, Guarding vile secrets. [Deep calls deep through cataracts Waves and billows sweep away] The undeserving, Corrupted souls seeking fame, Black-hearted mortals. [Among golden chalices Stands the simple Holy Grail] Guarded for aeons, Its holy water, if drunk Grants eternal life. [Monsoon waters swirl within Like tempest in a goblet] Sparkling like diamonds, Reflecting bearer's image, And the evil within. [Dorian Gray stares, aghast Ghastly evil returns gaze] Clairvoyance channeled, By chalices, to predict The future of foes. [Fates foretold by Kassandra, Unheeded by feckless fools] Dire monsoons summoned, To shower devastation Upon thoughtless thieves. [Deluge purges wicked Earth; A lone wooden ark rises] Vast vessel of God; Amidst roaring thunderstorms, A lone speck of life. [From B 612 The Little Prince watches Earth] Should wickedness rise, Sends his destroyer angel, Yrcom Ylventus. [Immortal Connor MacLeod Readies his sword for battle] 'Neath skies black with rage, Indra smites ruthless demons, As clouds weep with joy. [Indra decimates Vritra Mankind celebrates sunshine]
18 thoughts on “Many waters, or: A renga partnership, II”
Thoight provoking and Beautifully arranged,
Meditation in water, also the wrestling with the kelp forests I find interesting.
You are welcome, yes I couldn’t miss it.
I marvel at the discipline required to pen this wonder work.
🌊💙🌊 Abi 🌊💙🌊
Wow, unique streams of powerful haikus and deeply researched responses.
Starting out here…
Many waters cannot quench love;
rivers cannot sweep it away.
If one were to give
all the wealth of one’s house for love,
it[a] would be utterly scorned.
I’m in awe of the collaboration and the journey the poets undertook. It will take sometime for me to connect all the rivers, the waters and the floods steeped in mythology and history.
So impressed that the sacred word, from a book least read and spoken about, inspired the poetic exploration.
Abi, I… wow, thank you. I’m so happy that you see and appreciate the references❣️
❤ Thank you very much! ❤
You are welcome❤
Wow. Beautiful poem. I love it. Looking forward to reading many such poems and
interesting posts from you. May this year bring all the success, happiness and good health for all. Keep writing.
🙂 ❤ Aparna ❤ 🙂
❤ Thanks a lot! We wish you the same! ❤
Doubly difficult, merging two minds into one steam. I do not envy the effort involved but do admire the result.
💛 Espie 💛
❤ Thank you very much! ❤
wowww loved this partnership!
the references were so good!
keep it up both of u!
😀 Kunjal – thanks! 😀
Excellent title and the 20 verses are a very good start!
💙 Muri 💙
❤ Thanks! ❤