A Waltz wave poem
gray
over-
cast
heavens;
my daughter
believes
God's
crying
up above
Jerusalem
and wonders
why God
gets
so sad
during the
autumn
and
winter
months
Waltz wave?
- a one-stanza poem;
- nineteen lines;
- each line has a set number of syllables;
- the pattern is: 1/2/1/2/3/2/1/2/3/4/3/2/1/2/3/2/1/2/1;
- words may be split into syllables to fit the pattern;
- this form seems to educe a soothing cadence as the lines gently increase and decrease, so it is suggested that topic chosen for this form also be soothing.
#TankaTuesday
The above was written for Colleen M. Chesebro’s ‘Tanka Tuesday’ prompt: Poets are to choose their own forms and colors to feature in their syllabic poem.
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–Ben Harper (b. 1969)
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Definitely some melancholy skies here! 💓
Yeah – here too! we’ve had a lot (relative to Israel) of rainy days recently… I know it’s healthy for the country, but I don’t love being outside in the rain… not my thing at all!
❤
David
Yeah, stay dry over there! It does make for some cozy reading! 💞
Nice to meet you, Ben! Lovely poem, this is a new form to me, I like it!
💕 Elizabeth 💕 – nice to meet you too! Thank you for the kind comment, and I’m so glad you like this form… if you write a waltz wave of your own, please share the URL with me in a comment on my blog.
Also, please feel free to call me ‘David’, cuz that’s my first name. The word ‘ben’ simply means ‘son of’ in Hebrew, and my father’s name was ‘Alexander’… I know my pen name is confusing – I’m really sorry about that!
All best,
David
The heavens have been that way here as well…but today (freezing) clear skies! Evidently our only one for awhile. Can’t be melancholy all the time. (K)
💜 Kerfe 💜 – well… who among us mere mortals can know the mind of an omnipresent, omniscient, omnipotent being?
😉
David
Indeed.
David, I am so extremely glad the Mind of the Omniscient One is locked against me.
I’ve never come across a Waltz Wave before. I love it. Thanks for the introduction to this form 🙂
💚 Harmony 💚 – my pleasure! it’s lots of fun.
If you write one, please share the URL with me.
All best,
David
At last, a waltz wave! Which form shall I try out? 🙂
at last? were you waiting for me to write one?
here are some more:
https://skepticskaddish.com/2021/10/01/twitter-poetry-2021-week-39/
Ma friend, it’s been a long time since you’d written a waltz wave, so yeah, I did expect one to come from you, it made for a refreshing change! 🙂
This is too adorable! Reminds me of my nieces and nephews when they were that age. 🙂
😀
Beautiful!
❤ thanks, Jane! ❤
Most welcome, David! ❤️
It’s a lovely heart touching poem. I liked it
💛 Aparna 💛 – thanks!
🙂
David
tell her from me g-o-d gets sad in other places round the globe all the time 🙂
yeah – I thought that too!
Barbara, that logic won’t make sense to her, She is concerned just with Jerusalem.
She has a concept of other countries and climates… She’s a smart 🍪
Let her know G-d was weeping profusely here in Sth. Maroubra.
I’ll mention that to her 😀
a trilingual child will be able to grasp the concept of wide world – perhaps with the help of a globe – 🙂
She, in fact, has atlases in both English and Russian, not to mention all the videos and educational games that she has access to. She’s aware of the existence of other places with other realities than hers.
Isn’t she fortunate, I have 1 language and smatterings of 4 others.
❤️ Sweet one David❤️
❤ Cindy ❤ – she is!
😉
David
❤️ totally❤️🥰🎉
I can probs tell I’m up L8
Tried to send you a poem but not going through? Url blacks out on my phone. I’ll try on computer in the morning
Good night, Dear Cindy
🙏🌎
Sweet!
🥰 Worms 🥰 – she rots my teeth!
lol i like it. 🙂
Aww, that’s lovely!
😊 yeah, I thought you’d like this one, Ingrid
She’s not the only one
🥰 Andrew 🥰