Nortul lernapog deen, or: Ov iddage

My 1st Rimas Dissolutas

Imagine words bypassed your brain
like a foreign language,
their sounds pounding upon your heart.
Pretend you've no idea what I mean;
or maybe you don't have to.

Could I convey pleasure and pain;
make you feel the crushing weight of my baggage;
paint words upon the page like art,
transfix you with strange squiggles on a screen
that, somehow, amazingly, deeply affect you?

I'd rather not explain
but simply provide vantage
points for the open-minded, tearing apart
precise definitions so they may read between
these lines I write, as I do.

What if this final xivi expresses klane
buk every wye shobul thought ov iddage
deeply fon guiff sense schart 
that schnerping conceptually nortul lernapog deen
deep ziller inside bownyet feels true?

d’Verse poetics prompt

Exploring the realm of French Literature

At d’Verse, poets were encourage to write poems in a medieval French form called the โ€œRima Dissolutas.โ€


Rima Dissolutas?

  • Stanza contains no end rhymes, but each line in each stanza rhymes with the corresponding line in the next stanza โ€“ sometimes employing an envoi at the end;
  • Hereโ€™s how the end rhymes would work in a Rimas Dissolutas with three five-line stanzas:
    • (1-a, 2-b, 3-c, 4-d, 5-e) (6-a, 7-b, 8-c, 9-d, 10-e) (11-a, 12-b, 13-c, 14-d, 15-e)
    • (If the poem has an envoi, it might be 2-3 lines long using the c, d, and/or e rhymes.)

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Ben Harper (b. 1969)

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74 thoughts on “Nortul lernapog deen, or: Ov iddage”

  1. Enjoyed what I could grasp of this, i.e., the English. Especially like ” tearing apart/precise definitions so they may read between/these lines I write, as I do…” Language is our link as humans, all we have to tie us to another’s experience and thoughts, well-used here.

    1. The last stanza is totally nonsense – there’s nothing to “grasp” – only to experience ๐Ÿ™‚

      Thanks so much, HW!

      โค
      David

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