Mutiny, or: Inner space

A quadrille

In the form of a Than Bauk

Just got the news
that my muse has
refused to aid
me - betrayed me!
Dismayed, I sigh.
Thus denied, words
won't fly without
her about; and
rerouting thoughts
through new dots just
leaves knotted lines.
Undermined, I'm
inclined to throw in my worn towel.

Than Bauk

  • A verse has at least three lines;
  • Every line has four syllables;
  • The nickname for this form of poetry, could be โ€œStairwayโ€, because of the rhyme steps through the poem. This is the basic rhyme scheme:
    • O. O. O. a
      O. O. a. O
      O. a. O. b
      O. O. b. O
      O. b. O. c
      O. O. c. O
      O. c. O. d. etc.;
  • A verse frequently ends with a longer line, often of 5, 7, 9 or even 11 syllables.

dโ€™Verse Quadrille #143:

The above Than Bauk is my take on today’s dโ€™Verseโ€™s Quadrille challenge.

The Quadrille is simply a poem of 44 words (excluding the title), and it can take any form. This weekโ€™s challenge was to use the word โ€œmuseโ€ in a Quadrille.

Let’s write poetry together!

When it comes to partnership, some humans can make their lives alone – it’s possible. But creatively, it’s more like painting: you can’t just use the same colours in every painting. It’s just not an option. You can’t take the same photograph every time and live with art forms with no differences.

Ben Harper (b. 1969)

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79 thoughts on “Mutiny, or: Inner space”

  1. I like this form, and you’ve really used it well to present your ideas in a way that skips into the reader’s mind. The rhyme scheme is almost hypnotic. I especially like “rerouting thoughts/through new dots just/leaves knotted lines.”

  2. That last line reminded me of Hitchhikers Guide to The Galaxy, and how all hitchhikers should make sure to bring a towel. Iโ€™ve had those days where it doesnโ€™t matter what you try, the words just twist back on you and leave the whole page tangled. Fantastic take on the prompt.

  3. I would say that if you can achieve this level of complexity in just 44 words, you’re not ready to throw in the towel. Well done.

  4. Wow, David!! You take up next to impossible syllable writing challenges and come out with flying colours! I’m speechless. ๐Ÿ™‚ Nice combo of forms too!

  5. Beautiful poem. Loved it. It’s very interesting to know about many emerging forms of poetry. Keep blogging.

    1. well the expression is – “throw in the towel” – which means to admit defeat.

      and my towel is “worn” because that’s 1) how I feel, and 2) sounds good (has assonance) with the words “throw” and “towel”

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