A butterfly cinquain
I spat
the orange juice
out into the sink drain;
eyed the carton; and notified
Papa,
who chuckled at my innocence.
"Have you forgotten you've
already brushed
your teeth?"
#TankaTuesday
The above butterfly cinquain was written for Colleen M. Chesebro’s ‘Tanka Tuesday’ prompt: Poets were prompted to write syllabic poems based on “sweet & sour” memories, which means the poems must contain these concepts.
This particular memory rang out clearly in my mind.
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–Ben Harper (b. 1969)
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โค๏ธ๐ Colleen ๐โค๏ธ
Haha! So clever. That’s definitely a terrible taste. ๐
๐ Terveen ๐
This is so good, David. In Weight Watchers, they tell us to brush our teeth after we eat! It works!! LOL!
โฅ๏ธ๐ค Colleen ๐คโฅ๏ธ ~ thanks!
Isn’t that a fact: tastes funny after brushing one’s teeth. Lovely, butterfly cinquain we can relate to for better. Thanks for sharing. xo
โค Selma โค ~ a hard fact to swallow!
Haha! Nothing worse than mint and orange juice!
โค Muri โค ~ I know!
Very cute. Is this your daughter’s photo?
โค Dolly โค ~ no, I don't post pictures of her online…
Makes sense.
Even coffee tastes bad right after you’ve brushed your teeth. (K)
โค Kerfe โค ~ true!
~David
I can relate to this poem. Lol! It’s crazy how a clean mouth will change the palate so drastically. Great poem, David! ๐
โค Yvette โค ~ I remember really thinking that there was something wrong with the orange juice! I learned my lesson quickly!
Aww the sweet innocence.
โค Thanks, Bella โค
~David
Time to reach for the orange flavored toothpaste!
๐ indeed! ๐
cute! nice cinquain.. now don’t ask me to make one.. I do love tho๐
I would never make such an unreasonable request!
๐
David