A butterfly cinquain
I spat the orange juice out into the sink drain; eyed the carton; and notified Papa, who chuckled at my innocence. "Have you forgotten you've already brushed your teeth?"
The above butterfly cinquain was written for Colleen M. Chesebro’s ‘Tanka Tuesday’ prompt: Poets were prompted to write syllabic poems based on “sweet & sour” memories, which means the poems must contain these concepts.
This particular memory rang out clearly in my mind.
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52 thoughts on “Sweet, or: Sour”
So vividly put all the sweet and sour feelings!
Loved the cinquain!
🙂 ❤ Sujata ❤ 🙂
Haven’t we all been there? Yuck! Great imagery, David, and the butterfly cinquain works very well here! ❤ ❤ ❤
💞 Cheryl 💞
How cute! Well captured, David. 😀
❤️💙 Harshi 💙❤️
Ugh, how the toothpaste taste destroys all else! Wonderful memory, David. Love this 💕🙂
💕 Harmony 💕
Very cute, and clever use of a cinquain.
💙💝 Misky 💝💙
Very cute! A new cinquain type for me too:)
❤ Karima ❤
An interesting piece👌
❤ Kaushal ❤
Oh the poor darling
But what a wonderful and refreshing drink, pure on ice and a great toast as a chaser.
😘 Abi 😘
I liked this form,I haven’t been experimenting with a lot of forms as of late,so I think I’ll try something different….does the alouette count? 😉
count for what?
TBH, I don’t know… I assume so? Is there anything in the rules against rhyming?
not that I’ve seen,so I’ll just submit,and see!
I don’t remember how old I was when this happened… but I remember learning my lesson!
What a great way to start the day! 😊 Thank you David! ❤
😀 Filipa 😀
My son has done this too! 😂
❤ Punam ❤
I can’t even tell you how many times I’ve done this! 😀
😋 Mike 😋