Shadow, or: Oneself

A “Shadow Sonnet”

Rhyme should not be used for the sake of rhyme;
Verse should flow smoothly, of deep, inner verse;
Climb the soul's mountain, towards crisp night clime;
Perse shadow skies... spirit-alpinist's purse.

Dive back to earth, have some beers at a dive;
Relate your feelings to some who relate;
Live conversations leave men feeling alive;
Wait for thoughts revealing, they're worth great weight.

At the end of the day, truth's where it's at;
Wines, beers, whiskies neat; hopes, despairs, cheers, whines;
Flat fall stanzas that hit the heart too flat;
Lines must leave space for men's own subtlest lines.

Form only works when it leads thoughts to form;
Warm empathies? Well, t'wards those, readers warm.

d’Verse prompt: some shadowy lines

At d’Verse, poets were encouraged to pen sonnets of 14 lines and 10 syllables (iambic pentameter is optional extra), while starting and ending each line with the same word (including derivatives and homophones).

The word โ€˜shadowโ€™ or its derivative should be in the poem’s title, and the notion of shadow as metaphor or reality should feature somewhere in your poem.


Let’s write poetry together!

When it comes to partnership, some humans can make their lives alone – it’s possible. But creatively, it’s more like painting: you can’t just use the same colours in every painting. It’s just not an option. You can’t take the same photograph every time and live with art forms with no differences.

Ben Harper (b. 1969)

Would you like to create poetry with me and have a completed poem of yours featured here at the Skeptic’s Kaddish? I am very excited to have launched the ‘Poetry Partners’ initiative and am looking forward to meeting and creating with you… Check it out!

53 thoughts on “Shadow, or: Oneself”

  1. I enjoyed the expansive feeling that came through in this, David. And the sentiment that form should lead thoughts to form, not least the image of having beers in a dive! For some reason, that always brings out everyone’s confessions ๐Ÿ™‚

  2. I’m sitting here, shaking my head in amusement at how easy you make this look, David! This is insanely well-crafted and deep. The format is intriguing, too–I’d never seen this before and it’s quite enchanting. Well done (as always), good sir! ๐Ÿ™‚

  3. Well done for rising to this difficult challenge and making it seem rather easy – as if you do this type of thing everyday, with the added “repeat shadow” …. I think you’ve employed a great use of homophones – to wonderful effect. This is quite noteworthy indeed David.

  4. Very clever and well done. I just had a go at this shadow sonnet. Couldn’t even get the first stanza done. I haven’t completely given up but I’ve tried hard enough to know that what you’ve achieved here is masterful!

  5. A beautiful sonnet, David! The first two lines are very much relatable ๐Ÿ‘Œโค๏ธ

Comments are closed.