A magnetic sijo
wind blows live blues mist spray
languid music plays over diamond lake
rainstorm rock symphony pounds through
waters in a lather
delirious, she moans with lust
in sweaty dreams swims aching
‘Ronovan Writes’ poetry challenge
Sijo Wednesday #1
Ronovan encourages poets to write sijos that include the word ‘blue’ today.
Sijo?
A Korean verse form related to haiku and tanka and comprised of three lines of 14-16 syllables each, for a total of 44-46 syllables. Each line contains a pause near the middle, similar to a caesura, though the break need not be metrical. The first half of the line contains six to nine syllables; the second half should contain no fewer than five. Originally intended as songs, sijo can treat romantic, metaphysical, or spiritual themes. Whatever the subject, the first line introduces an idea or story, the second supplies a โturn,โ and the third provides closure. Modern sijo are sometimes printed in six lines.
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–Ben Harper (b. 1969)
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๐David, you nailed this one!๐
๐ค๐ค Veera ๐ค๐ค
Creates a vivid image and the feelings are the beautiful colors. ๐
๐ โค Terveen ๐ โค
Wonderful poem David.
๐ Lauren ๐ ~ thanks for pointing me to this prompt!
You’re welcome.
Magnetic poetry is back! I do like these, David, and this one grabbed me with the title and held me with the imagery and sensuality. โค๏ธ
๐ Michele ๐
Well done! I like the breaks and the last lines are just the kind of surprise that makes this work!!
๐ Muri ๐
Beautiful, David. ๐๐
โค๏ธ๐ Jeff ๐โค๏ธ
You and your peerless imagery chops! You really have a way of infusing life into everything you write. This one is so energetic! ๐
๐ Mike ๐
You’ve tapped into a new side of the Oracle. (K)
โค ๐ Kerfe โค ๐
You absolutely nailed it
I even colored the font blue ๐
I saw that Ben ๐๐
๐ค Willow ๐ค ~ thanks so much!
BTW, please feel free to call me ‘David’ – that’s my first name. The word ‘ben’ is Hebrew for ‘son of’, and my father’s name was ‘Alexander’ – I create this blog in his memory. I know my pen name is confusing – sorry! ๐
Sincerely,
David
My mistake, I am happy to call you David. It’s a beautiful thought that you have made this blog in honour of your father. ๐๐
๐ Willow ๐ ~ it’s not your mistake at all – all people who don’t know Hebrew would (and have) made the same exact assumption as you did… it’s completely not intuitive because ‘Ben’ is a common name in English!
โค
David
It is a popular name here in the UK. Infact one of my son’s is a Ben ๐
exactly!
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44 -46 syllables
A marvelous symphony David
I love it
Very refreshing
๐ฅฐ Abi ๐ฅฐ
Your poetry rock my friend
I’m so happy to read this side of you
Sijo sounds like it’s right in my wheelhouse. I will have to try it out one of these days.
I wrote the sijo and even used the color blue. I am not sure if it is supposed to rhyme, but I made it rhyme.
https://therichardbraxton.wordpress.com/2022/03/16/can-you-feel-the-blue-winds-blow/