passion's perilous pathways perchance exact painful prices ruined romantic reveries strewn across rambling ravines reaching, rugged towers rise constructed of rough setbacks
‘Ronovan Writes’ poetry challenge
Sijo Wednesday #4
Ronovan encourages poets to write sijos that include the word ‘passion’ today.
A Korean verse form related to haiku and tanka and comprised of three lines of 14-16 syllables each, for a total of 44-46 syllables. Each line contains a pause near the middle, similar to a caesura, though the break need not be metrical. The first half of the line contains six to nine syllables; the second half should contain no fewer than five. Originally intended as songs, sijo can treat romantic, metaphysical, or spiritual themes. Whatever the subject, the first line introduces an idea or story, the second supplies a “turn,” and the third provides closure. Modern sijo are sometimes printed in six lines.
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18 thoughts on “Ruined, or: Reaching”
Wonderful I love this, I feel it 💜
💙 Willow 💙
truly a wonderful piece in metaphor and structure David 🙌🙌
💞 Cindy 💞
A smoothly written sijo🙏💗
❤ Komaljeet ❤
I love the lilting alliteration!!
💖 Muri 💖
❤ ❤ Andrew ❤ ❤
This is a perfectly pretty poem. Really ranks right up there. lol 😀 It reminds me of a poem I wrote long ago where I went wild with the alliteration of the ‘P’s and I think ‘S’s, too.
😍 Richard 😍
Do you still have that poem?
I do. At the time I wrote this, I was working with different Dadaist techniques to come up with poems that sounded unique without meaning anything. I have since decided that these techniques don’t remove meaning from the poem, but they do give your readers a headache. lol 🙂 Anyway, here it is:https://therichardbraxton.wordpress.com/2017/09/12/september-poem-22-proper-catfish-pie/
Very cleverly constructed, David.
💜 Dolly 💜