Yucky, or: Spoiled

A rhyming sijo

I once received harsh rejection
Upon expressing affection,
For I'd erred in my selection,
And bought some "yucky" confections;
I guess... 'pon reflection...
That she'd expected perfection.

‘Ronovan Writes’ poetry challenge

Sijo Wednesday #7

Ronovan encourages poets to write sijos that include the word ‘perfection’ today.


Sijo?

A Korean verse form related to haiku and tanka and comprised of three lines of 14-16 syllables each, for a total of 44-46 syllables. Each line contains a pause near the middle, similar to a caesura, though the break need not be metrical. The first half of the line contains six to nine syllables; the second half should contain no fewer than five. Originally intended as songs, sijo can treat romantic, metaphysical, or spiritual themes. Whatever the subject, the first line introduces an idea or story, the second supplies a โ€œturn,โ€ and the third provides closure. Modern sijo are sometimes printed in six lines.


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28 thoughts on “Yucky, or: Spoiled”

  1. I read this and thought โ€“ this is a Korean Limerick!! Iโ€™m amused and impressed with the content and formโ€ฆ

  2. Haha! A boy bought me candy once in high school. The chocolates were OK, but I later learned that his mother had bought the chocolates, trying to set us up! Delightful sijo, David! โค

  3. ๐Ÿ˜‚๐Ÿ˜‚๐Ÿ˜‚๐Ÿ˜‚๐Ÿ˜‚๐Ÿ˜‚
    ๐Ÿ‘๐Ÿ‘๐Ÿ‘๐Ÿ‘๐Ÿ‘๐Ÿ‘
    That last line rhythmically fits perfectly
    But !!!! the Poet got to go back and ponder his conclusions
    Besides here is no choice between the yucky and the spoiled
    Nevertheless bravo bravo๐ŸŽŠ๐ŸŽŠ๐Ÿค—
    If one consider how quickly this Sijo landed at the printers and rolled off the press

  4. I guess upon reflection, that she had expected perfection
    Beautifully laid!

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