Butterfly Cinquain
one rent
butterfly wing
cripples more severely
than a hominid's broken leg;
it's more
akin to a torn, struggling heart
that beats impotently
in desperate
flutters
#TankaTuesday
The above butterfly cinquain was written for Colleen M. Chesebroโs โTanka Tuesdayโ prompt. Poets were prompted to employ this particular poetic form, which Colleen explains.
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When it comes to partnership, some humans can make their lives alone – it’s possible. But creatively, it’s more like painting: you can’t just use the same colours in every painting. It’s just not an option. You can’t take the same photograph every time and live with art forms with no differences.
–Ben Harper (b. 1969)
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The Skeptic's Kaddish ๐ฎ๐ฑ 
Very poignant!
๐๐ Sarah ๐๐
Gosh yes, a deep and beautiful read, David.
๐ค๐ Willow ๐๐ค
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Such a sad accurate description, David!
๐๐๐ป Karima ๐๐ป๐
Beautiful
๐๐ Marion ๐๐
Just love the message and how you bring it. You surely are an expert poet.
โค๏ธ๐๐ป Michael ๐๐ปโค๏ธ ~ thanks so much!
Sincerely,
David
Exquisite in its painful truth and simplicity.
๐ thanks, Janis ๐
This short poem really packs a lot of emotion in a small space. Love that the form and the subject make it a concrete poem as well!!
โจ๐ฆโจ Muri โจ๐ฆโจ
An aching sadness permeates this poem. Wings are the very essence of a butterfly, and without them, its identity is sundered. It may as well be the sky without the stars or an eternally leafless tree. This is a moving poem, David. So well crafted and profound. ๐
๐งก๐๐ป Mike ๐งก๐๐ป
An Emperor butterfly
๐ฆ Andrew ๐ฆ
Oh, David, this is so beautiful and so sad. Such vivid and heartfelt imagery. I love it ๐๐
๐๐๐ป Harmony ๐๐ป๐
Oh to watch a butterfly with a broken wing is so painful
Can you believe, your comparison to the hominid’s broken leg is so accurate. We can never imagine what this means to a butterfly.
Physically and emotionally torn apart.
You captured the essence and the appearance of a broken heart so vividly.
๐ฅฐ Abi ๐ฅฐ
โitโs more
akin to a torn, struggling heart
that beats impotently
in desperate
flutterโ The human struggle right here! ๐๐โค๏ธ
๐ Ken ๐